A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches.

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A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.

It seems to be logical, at first glance, to agree with the idea that dweller of Mentia will suffer fewer headaches in the next years as compared with the previous. However, the argument relies on a couple of less credible evidence or even doubtful assumptions. In what follows, I will elaborate on them in details.

The 1st problem with the argument is that claiming an existing causal correlation between the use of salicylate in foods and decrease of headache based on the cited investigation is disingenuous. Maybe, there are other unknown or well-known factors which are engaged in the correlation between salisylate and headaches. To explain more, since experienced headache is the subjective issue rather than objective one, the researcher in the twenty years’ survey had better blinds investigators and participants from the existing of salicylate in the foods. But the author does not provide more information about double-blinding in the study. If the participant knows that their foods contain even tiny salicylate, they maybe report fewer headaches as compared with unknown conditions. Moreover, when the investigators knew this issue, they also maybe have a bias to report positive effects of salicylate on headaches. Plus, the author could not provide more information about the special foods companies which maybe obtain more profits when the results of the investigation have been manipulated according to their viewpoints or strategies.

Even we assuming that the argument gives additional information about factors that are involved in the correlation between salicylate and headache, there are other unanswered questions. Although salysilated could be used as a flavor additive in food, the people who will use these flavors and foods maybe do not like this addiction. Maybe Mentia’s people follow a healthy nutrition plane, and they are not eager to eat foods which are artifice with some flavors such as salicylate, and they want to consume original or natural foods. Also, the Media have various kinds of residents, and everyone has its favorite flavor or tastes. Therefore, the insisting on adding salicylate as flavor to foods as a way to use it's on headache remedy is the fallacious conclusion. Besides, some companies maybe are not eager to use salicylate as foods flavors, and Mentia denizen buys their foods from this type of foods companies.

Even if we know that Mentia peoples’ taste and flavors interest, there are exist other flawed towards the use of commercial salicylate on foods industries and decreasing headaches among these kinds of foods consumers. Although chemical formal of the salicylate alike to Aspirins, this does not mean that they have a similar alleviating effect. Maybe aspirin has another chemical element other than salicylate which is more effective than salicylate in headache decreasing. Also, to reach healing effects the people should use a certain amount of aspirin in the especial period. For example, there every aspirin drugs have own traits such as therapeutic dosage, how to use during the days or night. Only adding the infinitesimal amount of salicylate to foods, could not provide efficacious treatment effects on headache.

To fully evaluate this argument, we require to have more information. The first piece of information we need to know is the causal correlation between salicylate and headaches. We also require to know more demographic and other traits of the Mentia’s denizen. Finally, to improve the argument as a whole, it is greatly recommended to be charry about comparing the curative effects of aspirin with salicylate one.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 81, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
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Line 5, column 193, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'knowing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: knowing
...licylate and headaches. We also require to know more demographic and other traits of th...
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Line 5, column 324, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommended being'.
Suggestion: recommended being
... the argument as a whole, it is greatly recommended to be charry about comparing the curative eff...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3058.0 2260.96107784 135% => OK
No of words: 572.0 441.139720559 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34615384615 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89045207381 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89507955801 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 204.123752495 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461538461538 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 990.0 705.55239521 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.2666407899 57.8364921388 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.32 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.88 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20633920711 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594665513752 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457987919516 0.0701772020484 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117371975521 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529288187436 0.0628817314937 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 98.500998004 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 572 350
No. of Characters: 2973 1500
No. of Different Words: 257 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.89 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.198 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.754 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 217 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 175 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 120 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 79 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.27 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.577 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.301 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.493 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.117 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5