No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study
Each and every area has becoming advanced day by day. we can see advancement in area of our everyday life. For example, people are using many type of machines during entire day, making form coffee, cooking, washing clothes, etc. so, how the education field separated from this? it is also improving. I agree with the statemant given by author above, with the knowledge of the outsiders, our study field is improved.
The most important reason behind my contention is that the outsiders give us a lot more new information, which might we do not know. if ancient people were never travelled to the other territories of world, their specific knowledge about particular subject was hidden from others. To illustrate this , if Indians did not went to the other states in the globe, their specifications in many fields like 'AYURVEDA', 'YOGA', 'HOMEOPATHY', and some others; were never introduced to the world, and other people are unable to derive any advantages from this. so it is very crucial to grasp the enlightenment from other than residents.because they only aware about what their parents told or teach them. Additionally, we know that the Russian scientists were developed the vaccine of COVID-19. with their knowledge of how to kill corona virus by the vaccine, would help millions of people, who is suffering from this pandemic.
Secondly, the residents mostly aware about things, which are commonly learned by the citizens of that particular territory. To elevate more information for the subject government should encourage the entry of the non-residents. they may have a good amount of new data for a subject. With the help of other persons nation could bring a huge success. For instance, the world-famous space-station NASA has candidates from various regions of the globe. Due to the mastery of different individuals for different fields; one carries grip in designing spase-suttel, other is expert of flying it, other has command on paths of universe. so it is possible for humane to enhance knowledge by giving others and taking from others.
In conclusion, knowledge is very essential part of the humane life. There are some people, who are not inclined to distribute their skills to other ethnic groups. Or maybe their culture or tradition becoming an obstacle for this. Even if you think that you are the best expert for the subject, without comparison of others how can you think that you are have full knowledge of the area? so it is always advisable to welcome other's understanding to grow our capacities.
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...t is always advisable to welcome others understanding to grow our capacities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2111.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 418.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05023923445 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78161446478 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574162679426 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.3232538806 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.9583333333 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4166666667 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.41666666667 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 7.80617977528 282% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147360193267 0.243740707755 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0380943338281 0.0831039109588 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428759706509 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0908113637937 0.150359130593 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562191225736 0.0667264976115 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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