A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
<span style="font-size: 19.36px;">The author points out that the increasing use of food products containing salicylates will have the aid to reduce headaches in Mantia. However, the author needs to provide sufficient evidence to prove the claim.
First of all, is the study conducted in a controlled group where people have the same habits and health knowledge? The residents in Mantia might improve their knowledge of health issues by reading health articles and TV programs; therefore, adopt a healthy diet. They will avoid consuming processed food products and turn their attention to natural foods. Moreover, the government of Mantia might launch a campaign during this time to encourage the residents to exercise more, establishing sports facilities. Due to the frequent exercise done by Mantia residents, it might be one of the essential reasons for reducing headaches. Therefore, the author needs to provide how the study was conducted.
Secondly, does adding salicylates artificially into processed food have the same effect as it contained in natural food? Processed food containing salicylates might have a side effect in contrast to natural food with salicylates. Maybe the salicylates added in processed food is concentrated or modified, which might be harmful to human in the long run. Before we can regard they have the same effect on the human body, the author must provide information that adding salicylates is proved unharmed. Also, considering salicylates to have the same effects as aspirin to treat headaches is unreasonable. Being in the same chemical family does not mean they can be treated equally. The author must provide more evidence about salicylates, whether it can mitigate headaches.
Thirdly, the companies are adding salicylates to more products. Therefore, we might need to consider that does the human body has an upper limit of consuming salicylates. Once the limit is reached, it may cause different illnesses other than headaches. Also, as salicylates being flavor additives, does it react to certain chemicals in foods or temperature? Before adding too much of salicylates to food, the author must provide evidence of studies to proof.
To conclude, the author should provide the evidence mentioned above the proof of his claim.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 127, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'have'?
Suggestion: have
...ed to consider that does the human body has an upper limit of consuming salicylates...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, in contrast, first of all, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1957.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 356.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49719101124 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02159854346 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522471910112 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.0259872616 57.8364921388 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.1904761905 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9523809524 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2380952381 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18762556819 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603146851241 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501292151794 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0874069127378 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618437159131 0.0628817314937 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.32 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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