A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The health experts mentioned in the prompts predict that - people in coming future are less likely to suffer from headache because of increase use of salicylates in foods. In spite providing certain evidences with logical reasoning, there are are certain logical flaws in the underlied assumptions of the health experts and that is why are required proper clarification of those conjectures.
To begin with - the health experts assumed that as salycylates are the memebers of the same group chemical family of aspirin, so it will have similar effect on the body of human health. But are they actually doing the same? It can be known easily from scientific sources that all the elements belonging from similar group will not impart the same beneficial effect. For instance - methanol and alcohol are both from the same group of elements however, each of them has different uses and effects from human perspectives. One is dreadful to health and another one served with food. So, it might not be bad idea to suspect that weather the use of salicylates are actually decreasing the headaches of people.
Secondly, the twenty - year reported study, that undergrids the correlation between commercial use of the salicylates and decline of headache, is authentic enough to rely on? Lets for time being we take the survey as a trusted one. Even though it does not clearify the whole thing. That is to say - what if the the people, suffering from headache, have been having the food , enriched in salicylates, are not taking any medicine apart from the foods? It may not be a fool's idea to think that the people suffering from severe headaches are actually having other medicines also. And more pragmatically, the decline of the headaches might be the result of the long usages of those medicine, not because of the salicylates. Then the health experts consummation on salicylates may not hold the authenticity.
Apart from that also - we know that excessive intake of anything is deleterious to our health irrespective of how much nutritious value they intake. Similarly, if salicylates are used as food additives as well as a replica of aspirin, it might even cause severe damage to the patients of the headaches, let alone decrement of their headaches. Morever, it is not cleared in the prompt that weather the foods that are adduced with salicylates are manufacutred specially for the pathients of headaches or for the overall people. If the target consumer of the manufacturers of those foods are the laymen - then what is the surety that excessive use of salicylates will not harm the people; having no headaches? What if it is found later that, preferably after twenty years that the salicylates have caused unyielding damages to the health of the simple folks. If that is the case then - it will be better judge the incessent use of salicylates in foods providng that it has good effect in lessening headaches.
More importantly, it is not ensured in the prompt weather the it is the demand of people that urged the companies to use more salicylates in their foods as additives or they are doing it purposefully for having advantages over their wholesale income. It Might be the case that manufacturer are using this salicylates in order to increase their demand of foods if, with sufficient evidences to proof - that salicylates have deleterious effect and also very cheap in price; helping them to reduce their production cost of foods. So, looking at all the factors aforementioned it can be sincerely concluded that - necessary evidences and clarifications are in need before coming to any certain conclusion.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 600 350
No. of Characters: 2942 1500
No. of Different Words: 263 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.949 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.903 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.725 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 208 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 148 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 107 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 81 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.456 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.486 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 240, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: are
...evidences with logical reasoning, there are are certain logical flaws in the underlied ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 233, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ng we take the survey as a trusted one. Even though it does not clearify the whole thing. T...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 308, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...e whole thing. That is to say - what if the the people, suffering from headache, have b...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 308, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...e whole thing. That is to say - what if the the people, suffering from headache, have b...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 374, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...from headache, have been having the food , enriched in salicylates, are not taking...
^^
Line 5, column 468, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'fools'' or 'fool's'?
Suggestion: fools'; fool's
...e apart from the foods? It may not be a fools idea to think that the people suffering...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 572, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...hes are actually having other medicines also. And more pragmatically, the decline of...
^^^^
Line 5, column 673, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this medicine' or 'those medicines'?
Suggestion: this medicine; those medicines
...ght be the result of the long usages of those medicine, not because of the salicylates. Then t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 857, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ages to the health of the simple folks. If that is the case then - it will be bett...
^^
Line 9, column 59, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'it'?
Suggestion: the; it
...it is not ensured in the prompt weather the it is the demand of people that urged the ...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 301, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...be the case that manufacturer are using this salicylates in order to increase their ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, well, apart from, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, to begin with, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.6327345309 188% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 28.8173652695 184% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 55.5748502994 148% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3014.0 2260.96107784 133% => OK
No of words: 600.0 441.139720559 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02333333333 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94923200384 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81673816524 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 204.123752495 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453333333333 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 978.3 705.55239521 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9751448352 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.583333333 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 5.70786347227 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230469278542 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693988686656 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508795343311 0.0701772020484 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133205894971 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039075427133 0.0628817314937 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 98.500998004 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.