A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The prediction and the argument are that the number of suffering headaches of residents of Mentia will decline in the future based on a recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia, which has shown the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. The author indicates that salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, so salicylates might have the same effect as aspirin to treat headaches. Also, the twenty-year study proves a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches, and food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods. However, there are several questions needed to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument are reasonable.
To begin with, the question needed is whether the effects on salicylates and aspirin are the same. Although salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches, chemicals are complex and they might have different effects, therefore evidence to reveal that salicylates and aspirin have the same effect is needed as the answer to the question in order to explain the prediction is proper.
Secondly, another question needed to be asked is about the twenty-year study, like is this experiment representative or are the designs of the experiment reasonable including the control group and the experimental group. Because only the reliable data or the results of the experiment could support the prediction. If the twenty-year study cannot attain the question, the prediction of residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future would fail.
Finally, the last question needed to answer is whether can salicylates achieve the possible therapeutic effect as flavor additives for foods. Since during the food-processing, various elements would be added, and some elements might cause salicylates to lose efficacy, which might not be useful and effective to decline the number of headaches. As a result, evidence about salicylates would have the same effect as flavor additives are needed.In conclusion, three questions should be asked and answered in order to ensure the prediction and argument, that the number of residents of Mentia will suffer fewer headaches in the future after using salicylates, be reasonable. The first one is whether salicylates have the same effects as aspirin. The second one is whether the twenty-year study is proper and reliable to make the conclusion. The third one is whether salicylates have the possible therapeutic effect as flavor additives.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 425 350
No. of Characters: 2238 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.54 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.266 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.875 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 181 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 132 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 70 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.753 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.422 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.596 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.122 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 444, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...e effect as flavor additives are needed.In conclusion, three questions should be a...
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Line 7, column 839, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...er and reliable to make the conclusion. The third one is whether salicylates have t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 28.8173652695 24% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2286.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 424.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39150943396 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95726880216 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.403301886792 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 747.9 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.5220861015 57.8364921388 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.4 119.503703932 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2666666667 23.324526521 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 5.70786347227 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.467484995831 0.218282227539 214% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168590141056 0.0743258471296 227% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118267766159 0.0701772020484 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.306174112209 0.128457276422 238% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132342345358 0.0628817314937 210% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 14.3799401198 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.14 48.3550499002 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.197005988 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.9071856287 168% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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