To reverse a decline in listener numbers, our owners have decided that WWAC must change from its current rock-music format. The decline has occurred despite population growth in our listening area, but that growth has resulted mainly from people moving here after their retirement. We must make listeners of these new residents. We could switch to a music format tailored to their tastes, but a continuing decline in local sales of recorded music suggests limited interest in music. Instead we should change to a news and talk format, a form of radio that is increasingly popular in our area."
The author conclusion of switching to a news and talk format from the rock-music format is based on many ambiguous assumptions and fails to mentioned several factors on basis of hich it could be evaluated. The conclusion of the argument relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence. Hence, the argument is unconvincing and has several flaws.
Firstly, the decline in interest in rock-music format due to old age people moving to the city after the retirement. The number of retired people are not mentioned. It may also be the case that the trend of other people is changing and people like to listen to other genres. The deriving conclusion from the number of retired people is baseless and a proper survey can be done to research about the people interest.
Secondly, the author suggests that people are buying less recorded music concludes to people are less interested in music. The conclusion is not fully supported by the argument mentioned by the author. The resident might consume the music through different formats like listening to music online or through radios and many residents don’t want to invest their money to buy the recorded music. Hence, limiting the music format in the radio as is not completely backed by the assumptions.
Thirdly, the assumption that listeners listening to the news or talk format is increasing popular in the area concluded to stop the music format is inaccurate.The word popular is vague and it doesn’t show how many people are listening to the news format and what time duration are people listening to the news format. It could be case that there is only one such news and talk show, which would lead to more people listening to the same at a same time. Or only one group of people are highly interested in such format. The proper research or survey could strength the authors argument.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed due to the above mentioned resaon and therfore implausible. It could be considerably strenghthen if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant facts to support the conclusion that the company need to completely change the format to news or talk shows instead of music shows.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 370 350
No. of Characters: 1767 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.386 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.776 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.532 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.765 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.12 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.471 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.584 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 160, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
... to stop the music format is inaccurate.The word popular is vague and it doesn’t sh...
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Line 7, column 569, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...r research or survey could strength the authors argument. In conclusion, the argume...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1816.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 367.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94822888283 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63246848793 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452316076294 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.8159875204 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.823529412 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5882352941 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58823529412 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216690788379 0.218282227539 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687776594125 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567858376965 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119958970947 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604203184399 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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