"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
In the given argument author has put his thought in the favour of students, like by taking wich setpes we can so the issue that we may get. author also put some prediction here and give the idea which can help buckingham to attract the student's, while keeping the though in mind author forget to think on other way, so lets see some ares in which author coulden't able to present his thought.
Here author say we should build the new dormitories, to serve the housing needs of our students, which surly not seems the good idea beacuse if we see this thought in other way, a lot of capital investment will require to build the new dormetories. insted we can take the survey of a students who already enrolled with us and a part of buckingham. by doing this we can have a lot of information which will help us to develope in other ways rather going with new dormetories. what if the problem is not the dormerotries. and even if we build the dormetories there is no such kind of assurence that we will get succeed in this. so this idea seems inadequate.
If we see the further argument author mensioned that buckingham's enrollment is growing and based on a current trends will double over the next 50 years, thus making the existing dormetories space inadequate. here we can not say surly because if we see this agrgument carefuly, a perticuler or any predicted figure is not given here, like we can not decide that till the date we have number of application which is no mensioned here. and base on that we can surly predict the market which is going to impact ous on next 50 years. now considering the sceario over the next 50 years it is a hell lot of we time, there might be the situation that many competitore will come in the market and can the business in there favour. what will happen in this case we not say anything.
More over the average rent in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently. How recent this happend is also not mensioned here, so i think we can not say surly that the rent is comparitively increasing if we consider time figure few years back.
Finally, author says here if we go with the new dometories it will help ous to attract more students to enroll at buckingham. but here we haven't consider the budget that student is having in town insted buckingham. now what if the find any cheaper dormetories in town and everyone decides to go with that.
there will be huge loss to build the new dometories at buckingham, insted we can attract the student by given them at of attractive facilities in existing dormetories.
Here i would like to conclude on given argument.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 476 350
No. of Characters: 2088 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.671 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.387 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.454 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 47.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 33.521 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.423 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.423 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.272 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 141, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Author
...es we can so the issue that we may get. author also put some prediction here and give ...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 320, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...author forget to think on other way, so lets see some ares in which author couldent ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 220, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'building'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: building
... lot of capital investment will require to build the new dormetories. insted we can take...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 249, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Insted
...l require to build the new dormetories. insted we can take the survey of a students wh...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 282, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...ories. insted we can take the survey of a students who already enrolled with us and a part...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 348, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: By
...olled with us and a part of buckingham. by doing this we can have a lot of informa...
^^
Line 2, column 475, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...ways rather going with new dormetories. what if the problem is not the dormerotries...
^^^^
Line 2, column 505, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...metories. what if the problem is not the dormerotries. and even if we build the d...
^^
Line 2, column 521, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...f the problem is not the dormerotries. and even if we build the dormetories there ...
^^^
Line 2, column 627, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...rence that we will get succeed in this. so this idea seems inadequate. If we see ...
^^
Line 3, column 208, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Here
... existing dormetories space inadequate. here we can not say surly because if we see ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 404, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l the date we have number of application which is no mensioned here. and base on ...
^^
Line 3, column 434, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...pplication which is no mensioned here. and base on that we can surly predict the m...
^^^
Line 3, column 530, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Now
...s going to impact ous on next 50 years. now considering the sceario over the next 5...
^^^
Line 3, column 723, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...t and can the business in there favour. what will happen in this case we not say any...
^^^^
Line 4, column 66, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Consequently,
... in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently. How recent this happend is also not me...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 135, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... happend is also not mensioned here, so i think we can not say surly that the ren...
^
Line 5, column 126, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
... more students to enroll at buckingham. but here we havent consider the budget that...
^^^
Line 5, column 138, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...ts to enroll at buckingham. but here we havent consider the budget that student is hav...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 215, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Now
...nt is having in town insted buckingham. now what if the find any cheaper dormetorie...
^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
... and everyone decides to go with that. there will be huge loss to build the new dome...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 6, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...cilities in existing dormetories. Here i would like to conclude on given argumen...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, if, may, so, thus, while, i think, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 28.8173652695 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2134.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 474.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50210970464 5.12650576532 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54003532481 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.432489451477 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 668.7 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.4676959737 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.7 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 22.0 5.25449101796 419% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193987033486 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716110431925 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0886330587594 0.0701772020484 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0925853549484 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665671351087 0.0628817314937 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 48.3550499002 135% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 12.5979740519 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 12.3882235529 137% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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