Some people believe that in order to thrive, a society must put its own overall success before the well-being of its individual citizens. Others believe that the well-being of a society can only be measured by the general welfare of all its people.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The given paragraph describes the Vitamin A deficiency among the people in the impoverished nation of Tagus. The author recommends the government of Targus that it should promote the new type of millet which international development organization has engineered which would help the solve the vitamin A deficiency among the people of Tagus.
The international development organization clearly suggests that the cost of this new breed of millet will be more when compared to one which is currently in the market. Though it is stated that the farmers will the provided the subsidies, the end customers are not taken into consideration here. The increase in price might have a direct impact on the end customers. As the government main intention is to improve the health conditions of the citizens they should provide subsidies to the end customers too. If not there are more chances that people would not be interested in buying this new variety of millet.
Also, the author assumes that since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. But this assumption doesn't hold good all the time. There are chances that people may show hesitant in adopting to the new variety. In that case, the ultimate aim of the government will never be achievable.
The author also assumes that the use of new type of millet will be the only way to handle this situation in Tagus. But there might be chances that the new type of millet which is promoted by international development organization might be playing a role in promoting their product in Targus indirectly.
The use of this new variety of millet may help in improving the health condition among the people in Tagus, but there are so many unanswered questions stated above which the author has to justify to strengthen his position on this.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 280, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ization has engineered which would help the solve the vitamin A deficiency among the peop...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ficiency among the people of Tagus. The international development organization ...
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Line 3, column 369, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e a direct impact on the end customers. As the government main intention is to imp...
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Line 3, column 510, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ide subsidies to the end customers too. If not there are more chances that people ...
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Line 5, column 142, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...pt the new variety. But this assumption doesnt hold good all the time. There are chanc...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'as to']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.272171253823 0.25644967241 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.146788990826 0.15541462614 94% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0672782874618 0.0836205057962 80% => OK
Adverbs: 0.045871559633 0.0520304965353 88% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0152905198777 0.0272364105082 56% => OK
Prepositions: 0.140672782875 0.125424944231 112% => OK
Participles: 0.039755351682 0.0416121511921 96% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.71161242865 2.79052419416 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0214067278287 0.026700313972 80% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.14373088685 0.113004496875 127% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0428134556575 0.0255425247493 168% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0183486238532 0.0127820249294 144% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1830.0 2731.13054187 67% => OK
No of words: 308.0 446.07635468 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.94155844156 6.12365571057 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.57801047555 92% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.353896103896 0.378187486979 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.233766233766 0.287650121315 81% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.165584415584 0.208842608468 79% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.126623376623 0.135150697306 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71161242865 2.79052419416 97% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 207.018472906 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454545454545 0.469332199767 97% => OK
Word variations: 44.4469043344 52.1807786196 85% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.039408867 70% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.2022227129 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.409974789 57.7814097925 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.714285714 141.986410481 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.2022227129 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.724660767414 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.58251231527 140% => OK
Readability: 45.3766233766 51.9672348444 87% => OK
Elegance: 2.17647058824 1.8405768891 118% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360081854487 0.441005458295 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.171505555329 0.135418324435 127% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.116492265362 0.0829849096947 140% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.67951905799 0.58762219726 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.184102081989 0.147661913831 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.198907577337 0.193483328276 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620346554076 0.0970749176394 64% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.508647193905 0.42659136922 119% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0670109408696 0.0774707102158 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277445853137 0.312017818177 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298150559099 0.0698173142475 43% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 14.657635468 89% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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