The argument claims that SuperCorp's decision to move to Corporateville is great because according to a survey, workers do not prefer urban area and additionally, taxes are low which leads to the statement that the place is safe. Clealry, the argument miss out on a lot of evidences and consists of several flaws.
Firstly, moving in of a large number of people for residence is not an indication about the superiority of the place. There could be variety of reasons for the same. For instance, the homes might be cheaper at that point of time or maybe there is good university nearby to which many students have arranged for their accomodation, or a lot of people return back to their hometowns to live with their parents, etc. Arriving on the superiorty of a place due to surge in residents is irrelvant and unconvincing.
Secondly, argument states that according to an employee survey, workers of SuperCorp prefer to live in non urban areas rather than Middlesburg. As per the information given in the argument, we do not quite really know what kind of questions the survey consists. How many questions are related to living in non urban areas and what factors were taken into account and surveys dont help us know the feelings the workers, it provides only a statistical information. Has the argument provided with more clear information, the argument could have become substantial.
Thirdly, the arguments assumes a co-relation between safety and low taxes. This is again very weak and unsupported.
In summary, the argument is flawed for the above mentioned reasons and is therefore uconvincing. Without proper information, the argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debate.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK, but too short
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 278 350
No. of Characters: 1377 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.083 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.953 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.79 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 97 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.385 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.248 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.335 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.634 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 23, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...everal flaws. Firstly, moving in of a large number of people for residence is not an indicati...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 351, Rule ID: RETURN_BACK[1]
Message: Use simply 'return'.
Suggestion: return
... their accomodation, or a lot of people return back to their hometowns to live with their p...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 376, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ors were taken into account and surveys dont help us know the feelings the workers, ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, for instance, in summary, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1420.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 278.0 441.139720559 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10791366906 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91195437599 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.593525179856 0.468620217663 127% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 61.514060115 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.428571429 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92857142857 5.70786347227 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105447586343 0.218282227539 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0331031678837 0.0743258471296 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471332381148 0.0701772020484 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0479438561344 0.128457276422 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433062960944 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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