The recommendation made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee is that following the century-old tradition of all-female education as to which agree on despite faculty majority for idea coeducation, will improve morale and financial help from alumnae. This recommendations offers a lot of questions that need to be considered for the evaluation of likeliness of the predicted result.
Firstly, the recommendation offers a narrow perspective. The conclusion of the survey is made in the favour of eighty percent of students and half of alumnae whereas the majority of faculties view point is put aside. There are a number of reasons possible due to which students do not want the change. They might do not want to come out of their comfort zone and make adjustments with the co-eduction concept. Students attend a college for a time period but it is the teachers who work and tech for longer periods and will be more involved in the upgradation of college. Hence, prioritizing student's point of view over student's might not lead to success of predicted outcome.
Secondly, argument mentions that half of the alumnae response was against the coeducation idea. Well, the time changes as alumnae are no more a part of college and the college now has different requirements and different kind of environment. Therefore, weighing alumnae responses over the current faculties is not a wise decision and thereafter may not lead to welfare of the institution.
Thirdly, the author mentions that all-female education will improve the morale and increase the funding from alumnae is clearly vague and substantially irrelevant. If males are not allowed to study, there might be lacking in the ethical values and morals when they venture out in real world taking up jobs. Hence, the implication of morale must be clarified. Also, the argument throws the result that following same all-female education concept could help them get financial aid from alumnae. The relation between two things is missing and in case, they dont get any aid, will the college face crisis? The answer to these questions are of prime necessity before taking up any decision.
In summary, the argument lacks thoughtful and reasonable insight for predicting the result. The author should consider the minute details and take agreement of faculties and a face to face talk with students because surveys can be misleading and do not reveal the actual problems and difficulties of the scenario.
Essay evaluation report
samples:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 410 350
No. of Characters: 2088 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.5 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.093 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.83 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 130 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.579 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.643 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.275 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.507 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.043 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 223, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tion of all-female education as to which agree on despite faculty majority for id...
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Line 1, column 334, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...morale and financial help from alumnae. This recommendations offers a lot of questio...
^^^^
Line 1, column 355, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'offer'.
Suggestion: offer
...help from alumnae. This recommendations offers a lot of questions that need to be cons...
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Line 5, column 119, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...coeducation idea. Well, the time changes as alumnae are no more a part of college...
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Line 7, column 555, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...two things is missing and in case, they dont get any aid, will the college face cris...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, well, whereas, as to, in summary, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2135.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 410.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20731707317 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88958930531 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531707317073 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 670.5 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.9699238998 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.368421053 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5789473684 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.70786347227 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204306636022 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0519276133362 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0979438878833 0.0701772020484 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118022645691 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135764030388 0.0628817314937 216% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 12.3882235529 129% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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