SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's original headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument claims that SuperCorp's decision to move its headquarters from Middlesburg to Corporateville is a well-done decision. Stated in this way the argument manipulates facts and conveys a distorted view of the situation. Moreover, it fails to mention several key factors on the basis of which the final conclusion can be evaluated. The conclusion of the argument relies on several unstated assumptions, thus the argument is weak and has several flaws.
The argument readily assumes that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg because of the increase in the number of homeowners. However, the argument links two different dimensions which are not necessarily connected. It makes a parallel between the increased number of homeowners in Corporateville and the superiority of Corporateville as a location for the headquarters. Indeed, even if Corporateville could be a better place for families to live this does not imply that it is better place to move for the production process. Moreover, the argument fails to mention the reason why the number of homeowners has surged and whether this people have moved from Middlesburg to Corporateville. The argument could have been much more clearer if it explicitly mention whether people have abandoned Middlesburg for Corporateville for a specific reason and if the increase in the number of homeowners is in someway connected to a better place for the production process.
In addition, the argument mentions the survey in order to sustain its conclusion. However, it fails to mention any detail about the survey. How many employees did the survey? Where do these employees live? Indeed, if it turns out that those workers that took the survey live at Corporateville than it is clear that they voted for Corporateville becasue they want the headquarters to be located in their hometown. Additionally, the argument mentions the lower tax regime of Corporateville as a reason for moving the headquarters. The argument makes the implicit assumption that lower taxes means safer place to work and also a cheaper one. Clearly, there is no reason why lower taxes would imply a safer place to live. Whereas, lower taxes could imply cheaper cost for the SuperCorp but not necessarily. In fact, if at Corporateville the rent for the headquarters is much higher compared to Middlesburg than the savings due to lower taxes are vanished. Therefore, the conclusion would have been much more cogent if the argument would have mentioned the size of the savings due to lower tax regime and more details about the survey.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above-mentioned reasons and is therefore unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentions all the relevant facts. Without the information stated above the conclusion is still open to debate.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 456 350
No. of Characters: 2350 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.621 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.154 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.051 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 132 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.912 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.319 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.48 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 652, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...er of homeowners has surged and whether this people have moved from Middlesburg to C...
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Line 3, column 745, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'clearer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: clearer
...ille. The argument could have been much more clearer if it explicitly mention whether people...
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Line 3, column 775, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'mentions'?
Suggestion: mentions
...been much more clearer if it explicitly mention whether people have abandoned Middlesbu...
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Line 5, column 1028, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had mentioned'?
Suggestion: had mentioned
...e been much more cogent if the argument would have mentioned the size of the savings due to lower ta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, whereas, in addition, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2401.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 456.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26535087719 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.134378049 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.427631578947 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 757.8 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.3314941089 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.041666667 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91666666667 5.70786347227 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236140939253 0.218282227539 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0741194766427 0.0743258471296 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0869689757262 0.0701772020484 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127641783455 0.128457276422 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0936689857206 0.0628817314937 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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