SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's original headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
This article is about the decision of SuperCorp to move its headquarters from Middlesburg to Corporateville due to the demand of the workers, lower tax of the new area they are moving to and the recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville but all this factors which make SuperCorp to conclude that they are moving their headquarters needs to be reconsider. Many things need to be taken into consideration before jumping to conclusion.
Firstly, Urban area, which is the present location of the headquarter can never be compare to an area that is not urban as more of their customers will definitely prefer the the present loaction of their company due to assessiblity and nearness as well as no one will want to stress going to a rural place, knowing that roads that lead to that pplace might be in a diplorable condition and basic amenities might be lacking.
Secondly,it was revealed from the employee survey that workers prefer to live in not urban area but have they taken the time to scrutinize the result of the survery in order to know the number of workes that prefer urban and not urban area? This is very important because for a worker to make the decision of preferring to live in not urban, because of low tax, area to an area that he might be deprived of lovely infrastructural facilites, the lifestyle and other enjorable things, it will be a rare decision. Also, for those workers in the company that have family, changing of location might even be a burden to them as they might not fancy settling for a remote area.
Furthermore, it was mentioned that low tax of not urban area is another factor but have they taken their time to compare the tax of the two location and see if truly, we have a significant difference? This is because the difference in tax might be even low.
In conclusion, the result of the survey needs to be thorughly scrutinize before taking any decision as the customers, majority of the workers and even the company management might not support this idea.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 355 350
No. of Characters: 1629 1500
No. of Different Words: 152 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.341 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.589 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.637 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 102 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 39.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.26 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.429 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.742 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.174 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 55, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... area, which is the present location of the headquarter can never be compare to an area that is...
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Line 3, column 75, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[10]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put between 'be' and 'compare'.
Suggestion: be never compare
...present location of the headquarter can never be compare to an area that is not urban as more of...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 171, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... their customers will definitely prefer the the present loaction of their company due t...
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Line 3, column 171, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... their customers will definitely prefer the the present loaction of their company due t...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
... amenities might be lacking. Secondly,it was revealed from the employee survey t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, well, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1669.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 354.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71468926554 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71131262042 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454802259887 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 22.8473053892 171% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 114.718980315 57.8364921388 198% => OK
Chars per sentence: 185.444444444 119.503703932 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.3333333333 23.324526521 169% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7777777778 5.70786347227 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129270859096 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538724452063 0.0743258471296 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121690683416 0.0701772020484 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0805452166301 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131446712477 0.0628817314937 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 14.3799401198 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.35 48.3550499002 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.197005988 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.63 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 11.1389221557 158% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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