Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The arguement is about the unique status of woven baskets that were particular to the vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and because of this, were believed to have been made by the palean people but recent archaeologists discovered such a Palean basket in Lithos which is separated from Palea by a deep and broad river. It was further stated that, only a boat could have crossed the river and know Palean boats have been found. Therefore, because of this, Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. The conclusion drawn from this analysis has some flaws which are discussed as follows.
Firstly, the author has not considered alternative path to Lithos from Palean village. Aside using the boat to get across, there might be other villages that are closer to Palean, which might lead to Lithos. This has not been put into consideration before concluding.
Secondly. that no Palean boats have been found also create some doubts. The boats used in moving from Palean to Lithos for the delivering of the basket might be hidden from the view people. Archaeologists need to do proper findings on that as there is no prove on thorough search from the author's analysis.
Though, the woven baskets might not be that unique to only Palean village, but there must be evidence with regards to this.
In conclusion, the author needs to come up with evidence that they have comb the nook and cranny of Palean village that no boat is there and also needs to create that clearity that no other path leads to Lithos village. Only with this will his conclusion be accepted.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 270 350
No. of Characters: 1268 1500
No. of Different Words: 130 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.054 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.696 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.302 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 85 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 46 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 31 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 17 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.769 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.383 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.374 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.629 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.077 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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The arguement is about the unique status...
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... flaws which are discussed as follows. Firstly, the author has not considered a...
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... into consideration before concluding. Secondly. that no Palean boats have been...
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...tion before concluding. Secondly. that no Palean boats have been found also cr...
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...is no prove on thorough search from the authors analysis. Though, the woven bask...
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...ough search from the authors analysis. Though, the woven baskets might not be t...
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...must be evidence with regards to this. In conclusion, the author needs to come ...
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...to come up with evidence that they have comb the nook and cranny of Palean village t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, second, secondly, so, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1301.0 2260.96107784 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 270.0 441.139720559 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81851851852 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38366929055 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 204.123752495 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507407407407 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 402.3 705.55239521 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.0035182276 57.8364921388 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.076923077 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7692307692 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61538461538 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301433933569 0.218282227539 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108982927149 0.0743258471296 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109468048581 0.0701772020484 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159768910234 0.128457276422 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11958796256 0.0628817314937 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 98.500998004 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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