In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports swimming boating and fishing among their favorite recreational activities The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits however and the city park department devotes little of i

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In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating, and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is, therefore, sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.

Write a response in which you examine the stated and / or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The writer of the argument alleges that the government should assign some budget for riverside recreational facilities because citizens are enthusiasm to use these recreational activities. Although the evidences that the author provides looks reasonable at first glance, when we delve deeper into the assumptions, there are rife of flaws and fallacious.

The first assumption of the argument is that citizens like water sports but the author do not present any evidences that support his idea. If there is any survey that shows this results, the author sould present them with statistical numbers. Even if there is an survey for this purpose it should be according to scientific methods and it should consider all the age range and different district in the city. For example, maybe it just asks from a wealthy district people that really misconstrue the results. In addition, maybe people just like to see these sports from the TV not doing that or they prefer do these activities when they are on the holiday not in their city.

Another assumption of the author is that the facilities of water sport are old and need to maintenance so if they repair people would use them. The question is why these facilities remain old and did not change or repair until now and why income of these facilites did not use for repairing. Maybe people did not ue them very much and lead to recession of that park. Therefore, this trend may happen in the future even the government assign enough money for rebuilding them.

Finally, The author assumes that water quality is the main reason and obstacle for water sports and if the water would be clean water sports would attract people. Since city council plans to clean the river all of the obstacle would be cleared. Even if the river would be cleaned by city council, as the main reason of the dirtiness of the river is not clear it may become dirty again. For example, it is possible that the main reason of the river dirtiness is sweage water of factories and buildings, so the river would be dirty again if the city council will not clear the main reason.

In conclusion, although providing water sports could attarct people and better quality of the river would be more healthy for the citizens, nevertheless, the author fails to offer cogent reasons to persuade reader for this purpose.

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Average: 7.7 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 325, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'rives'?
Suggestion: rives
... deeper into the assumptions, there are rife of flaws and fallacious. The first a...
^^^^
Line 3, column 261, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...h statistical numbers. Even if there is an survey for this purpose it should be ac...
^^
Line 7, column 164, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lean water sports would attract people. Since city council plans to clean the river a...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 208, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...e city council plans to clean the river all of the obstacle would be cleared. Even if the ...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, look, may, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 400.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.855 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43287895301 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1047800137 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.375 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 5.70786347227 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191333045271 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639713309635 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037639271841 0.0701772020484 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0958251003855 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303092712825 0.0628817314937 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 325, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'rives'?
Suggestion: rives
... deeper into the assumptions, there are rife of flaws and fallacious. The first a...
^^^^
Line 3, column 261, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...h statistical numbers. Even if there is an survey for this purpose it should be ac...
^^
Line 7, column 164, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lean water sports would attract people. Since city council plans to clean the river a...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 208, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...e city council plans to clean the river all of the obstacle would be cleared. Even if the ...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, look, may, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 400.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.855 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43287895301 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1047800137 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.375 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 5.70786347227 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191333045271 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639713309635 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037639271841 0.0701772020484 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0958251003855 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303092712825 0.0628817314937 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.