In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and
fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is
rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to
maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents
about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently
announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to
increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to
riverside recreational facilities.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be
sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the
assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author states that to increase usage of the river for water sports the city council should assign more budget for overhauling facilities which are used for them and the river should be cleaned to remove its odour. In order to support his/her idea they cited to a survey about favorite recreational activities and complaints from citizen about river smell but argument fail to provide sufficient reasons for support thier claims.
The statemnet refer to a survey and maintain that natives are intersetd to do water sports in the city but it does not provide any clear evidane and additional details about procedure of the study. were the number of responders enough or they just ask a limited persons. Did they consider different range of people from riverside to other parts of the city and all the age groups and economic conditions? Even all of the aforementioned item were considered, the wording of the statement is vouge. As it mentioned water sports are in favorite recreational activities of citizens, it does not mean they prefer to do instead of the sports which they are used to playing ar maybe they just like to watch these sports not doing themselves. For sterngthen the statement, theauthor should provide additional detail about the survey and if the survey could not provide adequte evidance, another survey should be applied by normed group size and standard questions.
In the argument mentioned, a little budget has been assigned for maintaining spot facilities. Therfore, it means there are some tools right now but the question is why these instrument could not provide enough mony for repairing themselves. Also, it does not mentioned these facilities are enough for the city and just neet amintenance of the new one should be bought. Then, it assumes that the city council have enough fund but in the reality maybe they sould cut budget of other consturction project, like building hospital and constructing subway, to afford the needed budget for this purpose. In order to provide cogent reasons, the author could provide some historical evidance of budget usage and a list of sport facilities and forcast their budget.
Finally, the author suggest that eliminating river smell could improve usage of water sports. Although removing odour of river could help to attract tourists and make helthier city, the author could not provide sufficent relation between them. On the other hand, the source of this smell is not cited and it is possible that it orginates from factories and building alongide the river. So, by cleaning ht river it would not disappear and we should consider of its resource. Therfore, it would be persuasive if they could prepare clear evidance of relation between odour and water sports and also provide some detail of resource of smell.
In summery, the argument provide some suggestion to increase water sports in the city but fails to provide cogent causes to support their idea.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...repairing themselves. Also, it does not mentioned these facilities are enough for the cit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, so, then, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 11.1786427146 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2457.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 486.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05555555556 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52057529184 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465020576132 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 765.0 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6216793986 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.315789474 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5789473684 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.94736842105 5.70786347227 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200536092059 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.064361465333 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474918380187 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128002485299 0.128457276422 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422327171427 0.0628817314937 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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