In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities.
Although state government announced the plans to clean the mason river the author’s argument based on allocating more funds to create riverside recreational facilities does stands doubtful and full of some of the author’s sweet but doubtful assumptions. Also let’s say it is easy that residents are complaining about quality of the river the author’s argument that because the state announced the plans the water sport activities will increase also stands doubtful.
Let’s look at the first assumption which author has made by saying that the survey said residents of city only “rank” water sports among their favourite activities. This statement of author stands with an obvious assumptions. I.e. how many residents were gone through this survey with compared to city population after that what if the residents who gone through this survey rank other sport activities also beside water sports. How many actual residents enjoyed or played water sports. Author has not pointed the actual survey results and this kind of assumptions stand questionable. If author cleared these assumptions then we can look forward.
Furthermore the author stated that despite the residents love for water sport activities the use of Mason River for these activities is rare and also stated that city park department spends little of its budget to maintain these facilities. Those both statements come up with various assumptions of author. For example If the river is not used for these activities then why the author is assuming that riverside recreational facilities will be used? If the river’s flow is drastic enough to not withstand the water sports ability then it is of no use for residents. And also if city park department knows this reason hence also they are not willing to spend more funds? This can also be true.
The next one is author stated that for years residents has been complaining regarding the quality of water which is smelly. This statement of author is unclear about how much residents have complained about the quality and also if for years they have been complaining why state government has now announced the plan? This also shows the doubt on the system that if they can clean the river in given time or not although the time is not given by government they only announced the plan there is no clarity among the plan. If the problem of smell is because of the natural minerals which are blowing out in river then there is no use of cleaning the river it will again show its image which is now seen.
As we have seen so much assumptions and doubts on author’s statement the argument of author does not stands faithful to devote more funds for recreational facilities. Also an clean and good quality river helps in prosperity of the surrounding city this can also be an reason why the state has announced their plan. So only on this basis that government is cleaning the river and residents rank their favourite activities, the government should allocate funds stands ambiguous.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 501 350
No. of Characters: 2460 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.731 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.91 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.481 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.723 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.343 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.117 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 202, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...lities does stands doubtful and full of some of the author’s sweet but doubtful assumptions...
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Line 2, column 214, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'assumption'?
Suggestion: assumption
...tement of author stands with an obvious assumptions. I.e. how many residents were gone thro...
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Line 2, column 586, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...kind of assumptions stand questionable. If author cleared these assumptions then w...
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Line 3, column 2, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...assumptions then we can look forward. Furthermore the author stated that despite the resi...
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Line 4, column 171, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...tatement of author is unclear about how much residents have complained about the qua...
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Line 5, column 21, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...which is now seen. As we have seen so much assumptions and doubts on author’s stat...
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Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'stand'
Suggestion: stand
...atement the argument of author does not stands faithful to devote more funds for recre...
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Line 5, column 168, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...more funds for recreational facilities. Also an clean and good quality river helps i...
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Line 5, column 173, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...funds for recreational facilities. Also an clean and good quality river helps in p...
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Line 5, column 266, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...f the surrounding city this can also be an reason why the state has announced thei...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, regarding, so, then, for example, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2514.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 501.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01796407186 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57385210192 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.399201596806 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 755.1 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.2317233594 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.714285714 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8571428571 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2380952381 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282524999695 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0925186209306 0.0743258471296 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0920512336075 0.0701772020484 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169505695761 0.128457276422 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0984756884558 0.0628817314937 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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