In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favourite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
To begin with, people the survey’s result cannot prove as a predication of people’s actual behavior, It might because of the Mason City riverside water sports as in high demand, which will be translated into usage. This survey might interview in a really hot summer, so all people want to swimming, boating and fishing. In the hot summer, all people want to have a cold day. On the other hand, the author reports their love for water sports. However, the scope and effectiveness of the survey are not clear. For example, the survey may ask residents whether they like to use rivers for water sports, The sample of this experiment may not represent all the urban residents, but only the residents along the river. And the survey might only contain two questions specifically about river sports. We just don't know the specific situation. It means it cannot effectively support the author's argument.
Secondly, from this short essay know that it does not means the government department should devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. It just like this short essay says, the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. When the river is clean up and to make some recreational facilities it means the river will dirty again. That means it doesn’t make sense to use the money. Then the residents' use of Mason River will be affected.
Last but not least, the local government decided to give this year’s budget in Mason City’s river because of the smell and the dirty quality of the water. The author assumes that the government should also fund more money in riverside recreational facilities. The logic here is not reasonable.
To sum up, it has not rigorous prove it. So the city government should not for much money in this year’s budget to riverside recreational facilities.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: To begin with, people the survey's result cannot prove as a predication of people's actual behavior, It might because of the Mason City riverside water sports as in high demand, which will be translated into usage.
Description: A preposition is not usually followed by a comma
Suggestion: Refer to with and ,
Sentence: Secondly, from this short essay know that it does not means the government department should devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities.
Description: The fragment essay know that is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace know with verb, past tense
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to should and devotes
Sentence: When the river is clean up and to make some recreational facilities it means the river will dirty again.
Description: An adjective is not usually followed by an adverb, particle
Suggestion: Refer to clean and up
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to will and dirty
Sentence: The author assumes that the government should also fund more money in riverside recreational facilities.
Description: A noun, singular, proper is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to riverside and recreational
Sentence: To sum up, it has not rigorous prove it.
Description: The word sum is not usually used as a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to sum
Description: An adjective is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to rigorous and prove
Sentence: So the city government should not for much money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.
Description: A noun, singular, proper is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to riverside and recreational
Sentence: This survey might interview in a really hot summer, so all people want to swimming, boating and fishing.
Error: summer Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In the hot summer, all people want to have a cold day.
Error: summer Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: For example, the survey may ask residents whether they like to use rivers for water sports, The sample of this experiment may not represent all the urban residents, but only the residents along the river.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: That means it doesn't make sense to use the money.
Error: doesn Suggestion: does
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 310 350
No. of Characters: 1475 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.196 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.758 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.472 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 93 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 60 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.316 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.572 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.3 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.479 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 813, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...pecifically about river sports. We just dont know the specific situation. It means i...
^^^^
Line 1, column 890, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...means it cannot effectively support the authors argument. Secondly, from this short e...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 55, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'mean'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: mean
... this short essay know that it does not means the government department should devote...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 55, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'mean'
Suggestion: mean
... this short essay know that it does not means the government department should devote...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 94, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'devote'
Suggestion: devote
... means the government department should devotes little of its budget to maintaining riv...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 32, Rule ID: PROVE_PROOF[2]
Message: Did you mean 'proof' (noun) instead of prove (verb)?
Suggestion: proof
...able. To sum up, it has not rigorous prove it. So the city government should not f...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, for example, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.6327345309 25% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1546.0 2260.96107784 68% => OK
No of words: 308.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01948051948 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70459612369 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506493506494 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.0099462173 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.3684210526 119.503703932 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2105263158 23.324526521 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36842105263 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24819710395 0.218282227539 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674143243237 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551546165454 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143747503734 0.128457276422 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357396620194 0.0628817314937 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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