“Techcorporation is our top pick for investment this term. We urge all of our clients to invest in this new company. For the first time in ten years, a company that has developed satellite technology has been approved by the FTA to compete with the current satellite provider. That company is Techcorporation. A consumer survey last year indicated that over eighty percent of respondents were dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider and would want to switch to another provider if the industry were not a monopoly. Thus, the new venture of Techcorporation into satellite television will prove to be highly profitable for those who invest now.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.
Author feels that Techcorporation is the top pick for investment this term this conclusion is based on evidence that many people are unhappy with the current satellite provider and there is only one alternative thats Techcorporation. The conclusion is flawed in many respects and could better evaluated if following questions are answered.
Firstly, What percentage of people respondeded to the consumer survey form? The Author prematurely assumes that since 80% respondents where unhappy with the current service that means many people were unhappy. However this might not be the case, the number of people responded to the consumer survey form might be a small fraction of total consumer and therefore not a viable method to evaluate the consumer sentiments. A proper research is needed on the total number of customers current satellite provider has and out of them how many of them are unhappy.
Secondly, Is the quality of satellite technology developed by Techcorporation better than current provider? The author only talks about dissatisfaction of consumer with current provider but fails to provide any details regarding their quality of satellite and how they are different from current provider. For instance, If the Techcorporation satellite proved to be worst than the current provider then consumer might abstain themselves from swithching to Techcorporation even though they are unhappy with the current provider. A proper research on the wow factor of Techcorporation satellite and how they will draw consumer is needed.
Thirdly, Cost that took to built the satellite? The author prematurely assumes that since it will break the monopoly it will be profitable without providing any evidence to bolster the assumption. It might be possible that there was high cost incurred in building the satellite technology and therefore the company would operate in losses for first few initial years before they become profitable. Also other costs such as maintainence and staff salary would add to more expense and threfore it might not be the right time to invest in the company.
The conclusion is based on several unwarranted assumptions. Once the author answer the above mention question through proper research and surveys the viability of the claim can be further assesed.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 359 350
No. of Characters: 1899 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.353 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.29 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.858 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.438 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.124 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.604 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.098 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 212, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...vider and there is only one alternative thats Techcorporation. The conclusion is flaw...
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Line 3, column 211, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ce that means many people were unhappy. However this might not be the case, the number ...
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Line 3, column 421, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'proper research'.
Suggestion: Proper research
...od to evaluate the consumer sentiments. A proper research is needed on the total number of custom...
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Line 5, column 367, Rule ID: WORST_THAN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'worse'?
Suggestion: worse
... Techcorporation satellite proved to be worst than the current provider then consumer...
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Line 5, column 529, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'proper research'.
Suggestion: Proper research
... are unhappy with the current provider. A proper research on the wow factor of Techcorporation sa...
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Line 7, column 399, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...al years before they become profitable. Also other costs such as maintainence and st...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1939.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 359.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40111420613 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92038134209 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50139275766 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8233821978 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.1875 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4375 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9375 5.70786347227 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198182270567 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.064046259969 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760241927098 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10638058577 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0770211130641 0.0628817314937 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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