"For the third year in a row, the average household income in our country has risen significantly. That prosperity means that families are likely to be spending more time and money on leisure activities. Megamart stores should therefore concentrate on enlarging and promoting its line of products typically used in leisure activities: athletic and outdoor equipment, televisions, gourmet cooking equipment, and luggage and travel accessories.
Author's suggestion for Megamart stores that they should now be concentrating on enlarging and promoting their products only on leisure activities such as outdoor equipment or athletics and also on products like televisons, cooking equipments, luggage and travel accessories. This suggestion is based on a very minute observation that the average household income in our country has risen significantly in the last three years. Now as the income has increased the author has drawn this conclusion that people will be spending a large part of their money on lesuire activities and hence Megamart should follow his suggestions. Clearly the author has missed a lot of passuiable cases and therefore his suggestion cannot be considered.
Firstly, the author has mentioned that average household income has risen significantly but the author has failed to provide us with actual figures showing the increase. Also the author has failed to take this into account that even though the average hosuehold income has risen dramatically but the expense of living has also increased and hence it might be a very likeable case that the rise of the income is very well balanced by the rise of the living expenses and hence people have no actual prosperity and money to spend upon leisure activites, so the author's suggestion can be discarded.
Secondly, Even if the rise in the income is well high that it can compensate the extra living expenses and then also leave us a good sum of money, the author has assumed that people will be spending all of that money on lesuire activites which is indeed a false assumation. Since there can be a lot of people who might be intrested in saving that money for their future. Also there can be a large part of people who might invest there hard earned money in some shares or real estate so as to earn profit in the near future rather than spending on some leisure activity at that point. Hence Megamart stores will fail to attract coustomers and make a profit of out those investments.
Lastly, It must be taken into account that if the average household income has increased then it is a very possible case that people might be working hard all day to earn that money and hence they might not have enough time for such lesuire activites instead they can turn to some SPA's or other realxing areas where they can find peace without much investment. Taking this point into consideration the author has failed us to convience that why Megamarts should invest and concentrate on enlarging and promoting its line of products typically used in leisure activities: athletic and outdoor equipment, televisions, gourmet cooking equipment, and luggage and travel accessories.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Also,
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Suggestion: Also,
... in saving that money for their future. Also there can be a large part of people who...
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Suggestion: to
...ned money in some shares or real estate so as to earn profit in the near future rather t...
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Suggestion: Hence,
...on some leisure activity at that point. Hence Megamart stores will fail to attract co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2248.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 452.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97345132743 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63180246443 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442477876106 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.0 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 22.8473053892 162% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 103.157646348 57.8364921388 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 187.333333333 119.503703932 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.6666666667 23.324526521 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 5.70786347227 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258708633371 0.218282227539 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103999271561 0.0743258471296 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338613892864 0.0701772020484 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16891172029 0.128457276422 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440952530039 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.8 14.3799401198 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.92 48.3550499002 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 12.197005988 145% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.14 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 11.1389221557 151% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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