"Twenty years ago,Dr Feild, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his obeservations that childeren in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However my recent interview with the children living the group of island that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the villages. This research of mine proves Dr. Feild's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studing cultures is invalid as well.The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using Terria will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island culture
The article written by Dr Karp ,an anthropologist, proved that research done by Dr Field a highly known anthropologist , on children in tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Dr Karp in his recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that include tertia shows that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than others adults in the village and the interview feature the method that his team of students established to get further more accurate understanding of child rearing traditions in tertia and other island culture, this interview has some flaws that need to be answer before proving Dr Field research as invalid.
Firstly an island can have more than one tribes or people living with different traditions , thus questions arises that does Dr Karp and his team did his survey with the same village or group done by Dr field? its possible that the island of tertia posses more than one villages and Dr field did his research in a particular village that must Dr Karp may have left out because in the interview Dr Karp didn’t mention to have interview those area that Dr field have done its research on
Secondly Dr field had done its research 20 years ago , time flies, traditions gets change , new upcoming generations brings new livelihood thus could bring changes in behavior of children of island of Tertia. Also different group or villages in Tertia can have different ideology and thus can have different traditions.
At the end, to completely prove that research done Dr field about Tertian village culture is invalid , Dr Karp needs to answer above questions and he need to bring a strong evidence that shows that the research done by Dr Field is incorrect with respect to the village that Dr Feld did their survey on.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 312 350
No. of Characters: 1495 1500
No. of Different Words: 144 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.203 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.792 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.456 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 52 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 26.255 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.571 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.834 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.218 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
The article written by Dr Karp ,an anthropologist, proved that research ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...y Dr Field a highly known anthropologist , on children in tertia were reared by an...
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Line 1, column 502, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ure the method that his team of students established to get further more accurate...
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Line 3, column 38, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one tribe', 'a tribe', or simply 'tribes'?
Suggestion: one tribe; a tribe; tribes
... Firstly an island can have more than one tribes or people living with different traditi...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... people living with different traditions , thus questions arises that does Dr Kar...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eople living with different traditions , thus questions arises that does Dr Karp ...
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Line 3, column 212, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Its
...same village or group done by Dr field? its possible that the island of tertia poss...
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Line 3, column 268, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one village', 'a village', or simply 'villages'?
Suggestion: one village; a village; villages
...t the island of tertia posses more than one villages and Dr field did his research in a part...
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Line 3, column 437, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this area' or 'those areas'?
Suggestion: this area; those areas
...r Karp didn’t mention to have interview those area that Dr field have done its research on...
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Line 5, column 53, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...field had done its research 20 years ago , time flies, traditions gets change , ne...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ago , time flies, traditions gets change , new upcoming generations brings new liv...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...havior of children of island of Tertia. Also different group or villages in Tertia c...
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Line 7, column 101, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...about Tertian village culture is invalid , Dr Karp needs to answer above questions...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, talking about, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 19.6327345309 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 311.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90675241158 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50961139124 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48231511254 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 51.0 22.8473053892 223% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 144.561886017 57.8364921388 250% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 254.333333333 119.503703932 213% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 51.8333333333 23.324526521 222% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 14.8333333333 5.70786347227 260% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314448081447 0.218282227539 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.186337057677 0.0743258471296 251% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0997322152859 0.0701772020484 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198272992245 0.128457276422 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113454371347 0.0628817314937 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.6 14.3799401198 192% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.8 12.197005988 171% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.09 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 12.3882235529 230% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.4 11.1389221557 201% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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