Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument states that Dr. Karp interview based research is more reliable as compared to Dr. Field’s observation based approach and further research should be conducted based of Dr. Karp methodology to obtain more reliable statistics . Stated in this way the argument fails to provide the evidence based on which it can be evaluated . The argument considers certain assumption which remains clearly flawed until the following questions are answered :
Firstly ,whether the research conducted by Dr. Field twenty years ago holds true on the current scenario ? In other words what if the practice that prevailed twenty years ago has be abolished and the children are now reared by their biological parents . In that case children talking more about their biological parents is no way surprising in this study . In this case the arguments conclusion about Dr. Fields observation –centered research is no way undermined . But , both of the anthropologists observations are correct .
Secondly , What if the children are constantly told about their biological parents and their achievements to inculcate some qualities into them? In that case the children even when they are reared by others may tend to lionize their biological parents to make an impression on the interviewer . Further more , they may tell the folk stories they have been told about their parents by others. They come to know more about their parents’ qualities and stories and thus talk more about them . In this case also the argument is considerably weakened .
In conclusion, the argument fails to establish a clear picture of the study conducted on the island of Tertia . And with these pertaining questions unanswered it is not possible to evaluate whether the conclusion presented holds water. The author must provide data based on systematic research to answer these questions only then the argument can be strengthened .
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 299 350
No. of Characters: 1555 1500
No. of Different Words: 152 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.158 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.201 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.703 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.933 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.206 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.354 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.354 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.147 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1598.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 299.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34448160535 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87423459199 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518394648829 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.1436159668 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.533333333 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9333333333 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.70786347227 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 30.0 5.25449101796 571% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148621687891 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563396190951 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544701421534 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0907175519681 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0693313824677 0.0628817314937 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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