Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures.
Passage concludes that Dr .Field ,a noted anthropologists ,visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents.In order to support this conclusion author has come up with certain evidences.However on a deeper scrutiny it is revealed that none of the evidences land credible support to the conclusion let us scrutinize them further,
Firstly, author said that my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village author unfairly generalizes that as children reared before 20 years by entire village but now the scenario may have changed ,it may be that children memory may be vague.or the children may be immigrants or not originated from Tertia.
Secondly,author asserts that This research of mine proves that Dr.Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well author forgets that their are no statestical proof which can analyze and say that the method is invalid.
Thirdly,author said that The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child wearing traditions there and in other islands cultures as the author should recognize that it may be possible that this approach will fail in some different scenario.
After having seen the above discussion ,we come to know that the proposal has not been substantiated by the evidences provided by the author.The evidences hold inherent weakness.Thus ,the author must bring more data into consideration to make such conclusion.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 5 15
No. of Words: 295 350
No. of Characters: 1533 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.144 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.197 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.837 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 59 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.327 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.527 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 1 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.166 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, well, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1575.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 288.0 441.139720559 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46875 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08683289577 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.600694444444 0.468620217663 128% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 19.7664670659 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 72.0 22.8473053892 315% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 266.920751348 57.8364921388 462% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 393.75 119.503703932 329% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 72.0 23.324526521 309% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 25.5 5.70786347227 447% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353185124876 0.218282227539 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15598955681 0.0743258471296 210% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.19068270096 0.0701772020484 272% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171536870403 0.128457276422 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.168348240283 0.0628817314937 268% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 40.3 14.3799401198 280% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -1.6 48.3550499002 -3% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 31.4 12.197005988 257% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.63 12.5979740519 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.54 8.32208582834 139% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 57.0 12.3882235529 460% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 30.8 11.1389221557 277% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 11.9071856287 260% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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