The passage contrasts the observations made by two anthropologists about the child rearing technique followed in a remote island named Tertia. The two researchers seem to have marked their conclusions in two different timelines and it is contradictory to each other. As a result of the recent research, it is obviated to stop following the older theory of observative approach and alluded to pursue the new technique of interviewing the children of Tertia island. The author's assumptions are really not substantiated here and is glutted with flaws that can prove their research methodologies to be a mistake.
First of all, it is baseless to compare research that was made in two different decades. There could be a lot of changes observed in the community within a span of 20 years. Culture tend to change every decade with an infiltration from other community. There is no data mentioned about the impact that brought in the change to the community. It is just blatantly assumed that the children's remarks are highly regarded and considered to be the current situation of the entire community.
The second pontification here is that the author mentioned about an interview based approach which seems to be ambiguous. How can an outsider learn a local tribe language and interview them? Is there a possibility to learn their language? Are there any specialists who already knew the language they speak? Is the interview based approach viable with a mediator or middlemen? How can this interview be interpreted in a way that the anthropologist holistically mark in depth details? None of these information are shared by the author and it raises a question of how equivocal it could be to the future researchers of the Tertian island.
Finally, assuming if the children are being interviewed by a mediator or a middlemen, it is implausible to accept the facts based on the children's personal feelings. This is already a proven fact that the blood relations are knitted together much than any other relationships. Deriving a conclusion based on a banal expression from children is far from the required derivations. However, a blended approach of observatory approach and an interview based approach is viable to make the argument reasonable.
Thus, it is important to address the various feasible factors before following the recommendations as mentioned in the argument. It is easy to vanquish a method followed by elderly researchers, but it is equally important to prove the points that can supplant the technique followed by them.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 414 350
No. of Characters: 2090 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.511 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.048 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.023 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.184 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.364 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.27 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.27 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 219, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'timeline' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'timelines'.
Suggestion: timelines
...rked their conclusions in two different timeline and it is contradictory to each other. ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 41, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...First of all, it is baseless to compare a research that was made in two different decades....
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 217, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ulture tend to change every decade with a infiltration from other community. Ther...
^
Line 3, column 492, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...stically mark in depth details? None of these information is shared by the author and it raises a...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 74, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a middleman' or simply 'middlemen'?
Suggestion: a middleman; middlemen
... are being interviewed by a mediator or a middlemen, it is implausible to accept the facts ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 292, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...upplant the technique followed by them.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, really, second, so, thus, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2122.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 415.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11325301205 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08331496609 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506024096386 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.3867712053 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4545454545 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8636363636 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86363636364 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164751934152 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0443365518137 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493413489173 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.081036820393 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495391272727 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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