Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
The passage is flawed for numerous reasons. Firstly, it talks about things that happened twenty years ago and compares it to current time occurance and then it also unwarrantingly assumes that just one example, which can equally be an exception, proves one methods supremacy over the other. It also doesn't take into account the subject of the matters that are being taught to the children as they grow and blindly assumes that it isn't concentrated around their parents and is rather spread equally.
For one, the passage doesn't take into account that the observation done by Dr. Field was done twenty years ago. Within this twenty years a lot of things can change and that includes the culture of the Tertian village as well. Maybe within these 20 years, they changed their child raising policy from a ubiquitous system from individual, subjective one and children are now reared by their specific parents only. Or, there might just be a mixture of these two methods overall. To evaluate this properly, however, we need to know about the changes in the culture of Tertia Island within these 20 years.
Secondly, Dr. Karp's conclusion doesn't consider the fact that although the children are being reared by the whole village, the teaching policy of the village might just be about the importance of one's parents and family. They might be giving importance to those things while nurturing them and that creates a strong impression on the children's mind and that's why they talk about their parents more and not about the whole village because that's just how they were brought up in the first place. A broader knowledge about the culture of the Tertians and their teaching methods as well as contents would be really helpful to assess this point.
Finally, the interview-centered method might just be asking them questions about their parents or things that somehow relate to their parents. Then the children's parent-centric answers should not really come as a surprise. Again, just because the interview-centered method gives a different result doesn't mean that the results that it got is more correct or superior to the result of the observation method and therefore proves that method invalid. One example cannot prove than one method is working and the other is not and in the future, another method may get a different result but that cannot definitively prove that the earlier two methods are 100 percent invalid. Threfore, we need more information about both the correctness of the result and the topics of the interview-centered method to properly reach a conclusion.
The passage, after getting a different result from another method hastily reaches the conclusion that the earlier method is invalid. Moreover, it takes in account neither the time discrepancy nor the contents or the teaching methods of the tertians ti verify that either of the methods are correct and proper and therefore must be viewed as a fallacious reasoning based on faulty and unwarranted assumptions.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not exactly
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 498 350
No. of Characters: 2455 1500
No. of Different Words: 229 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.724 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.93 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.61 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 192 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 132 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.643 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.557 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 300, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...thods supremacy over the other. It also doesnt take into account the subject of the ma...
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Line 1, column 431, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...s they grow and blindly assumes that it isnt concentrated around their parents and i...
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Line 3, column 22, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...spread equally. For one, the passage doesnt take into account that the observation ...
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Line 5, column 32, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ears. Secondly, Dr. Karps conclusion doesnt consider the fact that although the chi...
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Line 5, column 196, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...e might just be about the importance of ones parents and family. They might be givin...
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Line 5, column 353, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...ng impression on the childrens mind and thats why they talk about their parents more ...
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Line 5, column 438, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...and not about the whole village because thats just how they were brought up in the fi...
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Line 7, column 299, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...entered method gives a different result doesnt mean that the results that it got is mo...
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Line 9, column 241, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'tertians'' or 'tertian's'?
Suggestion: tertians'; tertian's
...contents or the teaching methods of the tertians ti verify that either of the methods ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, as well as, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 11.1786427146 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2500.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 493.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07099391481 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64086613292 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468559837728 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 756.9 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.3521428494 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.888888889 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3888888889 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.55555555556 5.70786347227 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129686902348 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440641452308 0.0743258471296 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0388267195017 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0740756773899 0.128457276422 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491172720432 0.0628817314937 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.3799401198 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.3550499002 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.197005988 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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