Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote the wellbeing of the societies and environments in which they operate. Others believe that the only responsibility of corporations, provided they operate within the law, is to make as much money as possible.
While I agree with the first part of the view that corporations do have a responsibility to improve the condition of the societies and environments in which it is operating, I am not completely against the view that as long as they are working withing proper law constraints, corporations need to make as much money as possible which is needed for their survival and understandably many corporation's main goal.
First of all, promoting the wellbeing of the societies create a better, more convivial place for both the employees and the employers to work. Creating a situation where people no longer are restricted within the title or their position and can act freely and naturally with one another makes the place generally amenable to better working and social interactions. People are more likely to do better when they do what they are enjoying and no one likes to work when they are withing strict restrictions or in stuck-up situation. Rather working where there are just enough limits to maintain discipline and otherwise a affable atmosphere overall, can greatly increase the productivity of any corporation.
Then there is also the effect of a batter, more safe working environment. People are naturally concerned about their safety and will not work to their maximum efficiency when they are chronically concerned about their safety within their working environment. Again, a gloomy and murky workplace doesn't increase productivity in any way and is more likely to have a adverse effect on both the mindset of the people working there and their physical torpor. Creating a better working environment with proper safety precautions will only garner more attention to the corporation as a better one than its contemporaries and will make it stand out among its peers. Thus, people are more likely to either apply for a job at the corporation and even the existing staffs tend to do better in a safer, more enjoyable environment which in turn increases productivity and makes more money, which is the concern for many corporations.
A better environment and society doesn't, however, undermine the importance of earning money by any means. Some corporations are fairly new and they need this early influx of money to stay afloat. While others might be in a compromising state in which the only way that they can keep running their corporation is by making more money. In neither of these situations, they can afford to spend more money than the amount needed for their basic survival. Therefore, giving more importance to society or the surrounding environment in these cases will be nothing more than foolish action because the company will go bankrupt before it even has created a proper working base for its workers, let alone better environments.
In conclusion, we first need to create a stable working situation for any companies within proper law standards and make as much money as possible which is necessary for its survival. But once we've achieved that we should focus on improving the surrounding environment and the social conditions to ensure a better, safer and more enjoyable place for everyone to work.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2623.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 515.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0932038835 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83734172408 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456310679612 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 836.1 704.065955056 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.7104464973 60.3974514979 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.294117647 118.986275619 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.2941176471 23.4991977007 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52941176471 5.21951772744 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214924172498 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0763668806495 0.0831039109588 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572467142435 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134859189797 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04923936127 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 14.1392134831 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.8420337079 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.8971910112 164% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.7820224719 170% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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