Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote the wellbeing of the societies and environments in which they operate. Others believe that the only responsibility of corporations, provided they operate within the law, is to
make as much money as possible. Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your
own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The views presented in the argument calls upon the question of responsibility of the corporations. Is it to be a responsible member of the society and partake in the goal of making it a better place to live? Or Is it to ensure that the corporation makes as much money as possible, provided their business is legally operating? Between the two, I agree the most with the view that corporations should act as a responsible society member and contribute to its well-being.
There is not a single element of the society that works in a silo. Each element has an effect on the other elements. Similarly, corporations don’t work in a bubble that only mints money. They way corporations work affects all of us. If any corporation is not actively prioritizing the well-being of their community, most likely than not, they would be harming the society and environment in which they operate. This is best illustrated by the example of Facebook. Facebook did not actively try to monitor the way their algorithm affects the content that is published on it, or to put it bluntly, they did not think about the well-being of their users. As a result, the unmonitored content that gets published on Facebook gets misused by extremist groups to spread their propoganda and hatred in the community. This has lead to disastrous results like swaying the results of an election. Even if the corporations only want to make money, they can not shirk away the responsibilities that come with the great powers they hold in today’s society.
On the contrast, a lot of people hold the view that it is the responsibility of the law and policy makers to ensure the well-being of the society. Hence, corporations should only worry about operating within the law. In an ideal scenario, we would be living in a world where our laws and policies are perfect and adaptable enough to catch up with changes in the society we live in. In such a situation, corporations would not have to concern themselves with the well-being as there would be systems in place to ensure that. However, we do not live in an ideal world and our laws are far from perfect. Thus, in reality, even when corporations run within the laws (which have a lot of loop holes), they still can damage the societies and the environment. Consider the technological space in the current era, with the technology changing at such a fast pace, there aren’t laws in place in a lot of countries for most of the obstacles we face, such as, data privacy. Corporations would be selling our personal data and it would still be considered legal because there isn’t a law about it, but none of us would consider it an ethical practise.
In conclusion, it is the corporation’s responsibility to take care of the people around them as we live in an increasingly interconnected world. When corporations leave the well-being to the law makers, they are just getting around the loop holes of the law to make money and shirk away their responsibilities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 601, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s published on it, or to put it bluntly, they did not think about the well-being ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, similarly, so, still, thus, well, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2502.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 516.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8488372093 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9946319379 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457364341085 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 783.9 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0959767247 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.25 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.91666666667 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269858462214 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823092703053 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630953679932 0.0758088955206 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172238641591 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0177210931085 0.0667264976115 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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