Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children today would be happier if they had fewer possessions. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The statement talks about the relationship between a child’s happiness and the number of his/her possessions. Personally, I agree that children with less possessions would be happier than children with more possessions. I believe this for two reasons, which we will explore in the essay.
First of all, when children have a less number of possessions, they understand the value of each one of them. On the contrary, when children have too many possessions, they struggle to learn to keep their them safe. Moreover, when these children grow up, they find it difficult to manage and value their possessions, like their money or their expensive gadgets. For instance, when my nephew was younger, his parents always got him new toys to play with. They didn’t think it was a big deal that he broke his new toys in a week’s time. When he grew older, he asked for an expensive guitar, and his parents got one for him. Unfortunately, due to his childhood habits, he ended up breaking the guitar in a month’s time. As a result, I feel that to help children understand the value, they must be given fewer possessions.
Secondly, when a child has limited belongings, he/she is bound to learn how to share them. When children share their belongings with other children, they increase the chances of strengthening their friendships. When these positive habits of sharing are nurtured in childhood, children end up growing to become giving individuals. For example, my most cherished childhood memories is when I and my friends used to gather at my house to play with our dolls. Each one of us would get our dolls and play make-believe for hours on end. Due to this strong connection with sharing my dolls with my friends, when I grew older, I decided to donate my dolls to the nearest orphanage. Hence, I believe that with less number of belongings, the parents ensure that their child becomes more social and caring in his/her life.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that when our children have lesser number of possessions, they are happier because they understand the value of their possessions and they are encouraged to share and give what they have.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1815.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93206521739 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79082834049 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502717391304 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.0961831745 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5263157895 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3684210526 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78947368421 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182949849322 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673246107186 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074168755921 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141529823517 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496720883415 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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