Independent essay
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children today would be happier if they had fewer possessions. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern 21st century our children have access to all goods they want to receive, and these goods have become some kind of substitution for real life. Personally, I believe that to make your kids happier it is necessary to restrict their possessions. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the marketing around goods for kids is so strong, and the proliferation of such kind of advertisements takes inordinate scale. Hence, our children have focused too much on the good they possessed. For instance, let's take just one good - a smartphone. All most all children in my country have their own smartphones. And they spend hours just watching YouTube and surfing social networks. Moreover, this behavior is promoted in movies and cartoons, such as produced by Disney company. I definitely think that our children are compelled to use this type of device, and your responsibility, as parents, is to limit their usage of it and show the beauty and splendor of the real world to our descendants.
Secondly, I know many families where communication among kin is just performed in form of providing gifts. As a result, children have a lot of goods but do not have real proximity to their relatives. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of it. My father is a very busy man. He is focused on his work and has a rather good salary. Therefore, my brother and I have received very expensive gifts and have almost all we want. Unfortunately, our father does not really have time for my brother and me. For me, this is a blatantly rigged relationship, and to make it better it is reasonable just exclude good from this relationship.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the fewer additional goods our children have the happier they are. This is because it will help to refocus our kind of real life, and, additionally, will lead to a more cohesive relationship among relatives.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84730538922 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90043589875 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553892215569 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.2952716033 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.95 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0954512656266 0.236089414692 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0309053919352 0.076458572812 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356323461086 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0693160083839 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0255298719012 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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