Your city or province has recieved a large donation of money to improve the education of children. It must choose between spending the money on improvement of early childhood education (for children ages 4 to 7) and spending the money on improvement of educaiton for older children (ages 11 to 14). Which do you think is the better opinion? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
The best way to increase your wealth is to invest money to your children, especially to their educaion. And, I personally believe that the younger they are the better will be result. That is why I would select the option to dedicate this money to children with ages from 4 to 7. In the following essay, I will elaborate on this idea.
To begin with, I think that in a period between 4 and 7 the love for education is forming. And it is government responsibility to teach our children how to learn and how to obtain knowledge. The beter it is done in early childhood the easier will be educational process for older children.
My experience is a compelling illustration of it. I have two sons 15 years old and 8 years old respectively. When the former was at age 4 we lived in military village with no access to good educational institutions. And the former had a dramatic problems during studying at school. On the other hand, when second son was born we moved to the regional center. It allowed him to visit best courses and children's clubs. Currently, he has not problems within the school. I think that this examples shows why money should be spent on early childhood education.
Secondly, there is not enough of kindergardens in my city. And it is a crucial problem not only for parents, but also for the economy of the city. Mother or father has to be at home and spent time with child till when child will be ready to go to school. Thus, parents stay at wome additional 3 or 4 years rather than contribute to their work. And to resolve this problem this donation should be spend to build new kindergardens and to enlarg current ones. I definatelly think that side effect of this approach will be city's economy growth, and this additional money could be spend to other edicational improvement for all categories of children
In conclution, I strongly believe that the mentioned donation should be allocated to enhance the early childhood education. This is because it will help children during future education, and, additionally, could help to boost the economy on my city.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, second, secondly, so, thus, as to, i think, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1722.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67934782609 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74290199281 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521739130435 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.1590471841 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.2727272727 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7272727273 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95454545455 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245057553957 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.059430323786 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709332806521 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132483731041 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444665736447 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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