Your city or province has received a large donation of money to improve the education of children. It must choose between spending the money on improvement of early childhood education (for children ages 4 to 7) and spending the money on the improvement of education for older children (ages 11 to 14). Which do you think is the better option? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Should we spend money on improving the education of younger children (4 to 7 years) or for older children (11 to 14 years)? It would be blatant to invest money in improving the education of children belonging to both of the above age groups. However, if I am compelled to choose only one option, I would prefer to utlise the donation in enhacing the education of older children.
Children in the age group of 11 to 14 years are mature enough to grasp the information and apply practically as compared to younger childrens belonging to the age group of 4to 7 years old. I remember teaching my 11 year old neice about magnetic properties of the bar magnet. She was enthuistically watching the experiment of magnetic attraction that I had demonstrated to her. After the experiment, she picked up the magnet and was able to classify the objects around her into metal and non metal. Thus, I feel it would be wise to utlise the donations in enhacing the education for older children.
Children in the age group of 4 to 7 years old often find to express their idea or an opinion to be ardous. Even after spending donation on their education, it would be difficult to fathom whether they are actually getting benefited by newly implemented educational facilities whereas the older children on the other hand would be in better position to express their opinion. Hence, older children should be preferred for improving their education.
Furthermore, it is a right time for children belonging to 11 to 14 years to start focusing on improving their communication skills. These additional funds could be utilised for upgrading the existing facilities such as projectors, computer and printers. They should be given a task of preparing a small presentaion which would not only boost their spirit of working in team but also help them to improving their communication skills.
Considering the above mentioned reasons, I feel funds shall be utilised for older children rather than younger children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 449, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding objects'?
Suggestion: the surrounding objects
... up the magnet and was able to classify the objects around her into metal and non metal. Thus, I feel ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, thus, whereas, i feel, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1651.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92835820896 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83714658723 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513432835821 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8337010662 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.066666667 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.13333333333 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289038163433 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115187263063 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106868816356 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179412210007 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130876060509 0.0645574589148 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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