Your city or province has received a large donation of money to improve the education of children. It must choose between spending the money on improvement of early childhood education(for children from ages 4 to 7) and spending the money on improvement of education for older children(ages 11 to 14). Which do you think is a better option?
knowledge is never wasted, whether it is given to a child of age between 4 to 7 or to the child of age between 11 to 14. However, if we start from basic then that would help them to build a better future. therefore, if I will get an opportunity to improve the education of the children then I will prefer to provide educate children who are of age between 4 to 7. I think in this way because of the few reasons which I will expound on in the following essay.
To start with, whenever we learn anything new, we start with basics so that we can solve any problem related to it. For instance, if we start teaching children with a basic arithmetic equation of mathematics like sum, add, multiplication, and division along with some basic logical reasoning concept then students can solve any tricky problem based upon it because all they have to do is apply the general formula. further, it is also convenient, as children of 11 to 14 years old are in high school. At this point, they have to choose between different options like science or commerce. therefore, it will be a little difficult to manage accordingly such as books for different subjects; biology, physics, economics, etc. so, comparatively, it will be more manageable to provide education to children below age 7. Moreover, children of age above 7, might not even know the basic concept because they did not get the facility at that time, so additional money and effort can be required to teach them, from the starting. Hence, that is why I will prefer to teach children of age below 7.
Second, children with a piece of basic knowledge can also apply for jobs when they get capable enough. There are different opportunities available for the youngster, who can earn money even by having a strong basic concept of mathematics; calculation, and logical reasoning. For instance, many manufacturing companies provide jobs to workers, from the local village, who has done their schooling up to the 9th class. Thus, In the future, this can help children give financial support to their families. even if they want to study further they can get a scholarship by qualifying for the exam without any difficulties.
In conclusion, I would say that I strongly believe that we should start teaching kids of age below 7 so that their basic get strong, which can help them make their future bright.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, thus, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1950.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73300970874 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6940391814 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504854368932 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4354535128 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.333333333 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8888888889 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180288296589 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620262520791 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614704927818 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107710507148 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064400714172 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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