Students are more influence by their teacher than by their parents
Whereas some people believe that students are most influenced by their teacher, I believe that students spent most of their time with their parents so they learn a lot from them (parents) in comparison to their teacher. Personally, I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explain in the following passage.
First of all, a student's character depends upon the behaviour of their parent. When a student develops a particular mindset, it is actually because of the surrounding in which he/she has been born. Evidently, when students notice how their parents are reacting in a particular situation, they will learn to react the same. Consequently, children are born with no prior knowledge about humanity. It is always been said that the seed of good behaviour is sowed in a child's house. If parents will behave nicely with other, then it definitely influences the child's behaviour because for them their parents are everything and they believe that whatever their family member is doing, it is only the correct way. Thus, a student follows their parent in comparison to their teachers. This is best demonstrated by my personal experience. When I was a young girl, I used to notice how my parents are reacting to a particular situation or how they are managing to support their family. As a result, I also learned to work like them. Eventually, I get influenced by them only by noticing their behaviour. Hence, I learned most of the life lessons only through their presence. They did not even teach particularly about anything as teachers do to their students. I am sure that if I would have spent most of my life with my teacher, then I would have also learned a lot from them. However, my parent influences me the most.
Second, teachers only teach a student about academic courses. In a student's life, a teacher also plays an important role to help them succeed in their career. However, teachers fail to talk about life lessons. Obviously, only for a particular period of time, a student remains in touch with their teachers. Additionally, students only get to learn about a particular subject that a teacher is teaching. As a result, one can get improved at an academic level with help of their master but our life is not influenced by their presence. For instance, if a student is weak in a particular subject, then the teacher can help him understand the basics but, ultimately, he has to work on his own. It is up to him what he wants to be in his life and that motivation is not taught by the student’s teacher. A student learns this from their parent. If his parent motivates him to be a good person, then he will definitely take the right decisions for himself.
In conclusion, I m of the opinion that children are more influenced by their parents. This is because children spent most of their time at home and have a habit to learn from their family members without teaching them in person. Additionally, a teacher can help a student to be good in a particular subject but does not teach how to be a good person in life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...the following passage. First of all, a students character depends upon the behaviour of...
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Message: Did you mean 'had spent'?
Suggestion: had spent
... to their students. I am sure that if I would have spent most of my life with my teacher, then I...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... a student about academic courses. In a students life, a teacher also plays an important...
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Suggestion: period
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, second, so, then, thus, whereas, as to, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2511.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 535.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69345794393 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80937282943 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67889269418 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.416822429907 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 768.6 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.0513780773 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.7 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8333333333 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46666666667 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.88709677419 327% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.491965046935 0.236089414692 208% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153444776655 0.076458572812 201% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129736084467 0.0737576698707 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.363143414611 0.150856017488 241% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572777272483 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.84 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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