The following is an excerpt from a speech given to the School Board about a change to the curriculum:
"Because the future will be dominated by technology, we must make four years of computer programming mandatory for all high school students. If our students take these classes, they’ll all be able to get high-paying programming jobs and lead fulfilling lives because software engineers and data scientists have the best job prospects and salaries. Therefore, we must educate our students so they can secure these kinds of jobs. Even if they pursue other careers, programming will still benefit them, given that all industries are becoming more technological."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In a speech given to the School Board about the change in curriculum is based upon a current scenario where technology is dominating the world. In the Statement, the conclusion is based upon evaluation that School should include computer programming course for high school students because it will not only help them to secure as high paying jobs but also prove to be beneficial in other career prospects. Here, the Author has made several assumptions which has to evaluate to support the conclusion.
Firstly, the Author has mentioned the addition of a four-year computer programming course for high school students. Here, it has not been mentioned that will the student be able to handle such a long course of four years. School students already have lots of syllabus from history to science, from social study to physical education. Will students will easily be able to handle the course. As high school marks decide students future so a student has to get passed in each subject. They have to give equal attention to every course. Therefore, the question arises that Students who already has such a tight syllabus will easily handle the pressure of additional courses.
Secondly, the Author has made an assumption that if students take these classes, they will get a high paying jobs as software engineering and data scientist. Maybe in today’s world, software engineers and others in similar fields are earning huge and living a good life. But question aries that will every person having knowledge of programming is on the same level.It is obivious that if every person learns about coding then definitely competition to get a job will also increase and to secure such a good position, will become difficult. Therefore, it is not definite that every student who know computer programming get a high paying job.
Lastly, Author has assume that every student in high school, after having knowledge of computer programming will take an engineering job. Here, The author has failed to consider other subjects. Like, Will commerce students also have the same benefit as a science student. Well, Biology students will not get software engineer jobs. In conclusion, Author did consider that if students pursues another career, programming will still be beneficial. Why because industries is also upgrading with technology. What if a student purse law, or Economic? Will computer programming also prove to be beneficial to them also? Therefore, the Author has failed to consider several assumptions which make the statement full of logical fallacy
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 415 350
No. of Characters: 2086 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.513 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.027 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.544 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.043 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.666 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.652 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.473 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...chnology is dominating the world. In the Statement, the conclusion is based upon ...
^^
Line 3, column 252, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun syllabus seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of syllabi', 'lots of syllabuses'.
Suggestion: lots of syllabi; lots of syllabuses
...our years. School students already have lots of syllabus from history to science, from social st...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 367, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...dge of programming is on the same level.It is obivious that if every person learns...
^^
Line 7, column 20, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'assumed'.
Suggestion: assumed
... high paying job. Lastly, Author has assume that every student in high school, afte...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, well, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2145.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 414.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18115942029 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63386165921 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468599033816 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.7403745282 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2608695652 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04347826087 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.391517579357 0.218282227539 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117016747678 0.0743258471296 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0847486462575 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251695636788 0.128457276422 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0771243811338 0.0628817314937 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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