young people enjoy more than older people
We live our life once, so we should enjoy at fullest. Every person in this world wants to make their life beautiful and memorable either they are young or age old. But when it comes to our fitness and health, young people enjoy more than older. As time passes, human get bound with health issues which make them less active and involved in adventures activities. Therefore, In my opinion, people enjoy their life when they are young in comparison to their old age. I believe in this this opinion for few reasons which I will explore in the following passage.
In our adulthood, we are more activity and enthuastic. We involve our-self more in adventurous activities such as para-gliding, sea-snoring etc. In short, younger people are full of energy and want to fill their life with great memories. People go for trekking, explore different place, learn about different cultures and feel relaxed. But as time pass, our energy decrease and health issues starts to lower our interest. We start to loose our enthuasium. Take an example of my grandfather, In his teenage, he used to enjoy a lot by doing many activity such as going for horse riding, hunting and playing polo. But now, In his 70's, he become so weak due to his illness that he do not feel even to go outside for a ride. This made me realized that as time passage, we loose our interest in worldly things. Hence, I can say that young people enjoy more in their life in comparison to their old age.
Apart from the energentic behaviour of a adult sometime it also about how we want to enjoy our life. As some people wants to spend their life by travelling and doing other interesting activities while other prefer to stay at home, read book and enjoy the peace. We cannot say that their ways are wrong . They have their own way of enjoyment. Such kind of enjoy is also preferable by older as well.
Thus, In conclusion, I would say that I agree with the topic that young people enjoy more than older because of their desire to live their life which is supported by their health. While it decrease as they become old.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, apart from, in conclusion, in short, kind of, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1714.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59517426273 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35538885814 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517426273458 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4745023957 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.5217391304 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2173913043 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.39130434783 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303687573362 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0962146169942 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139476613849 0.0737576698707 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223990444719 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067503393677 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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