Young people enjoy their life more than old people.
we live our life once, so we should enjoy to the fullest. Every person in this world wants to make their life beautiful and memorable whether they are young or age-old. but when it comes to our fitness and health, young people enjoy it more than older. As time passes, humans get bound with health issues that make them less active and involved in adventures activities. Therefore, In my opinion, people enjoy their life when they are young in comparison to their old age. I believe in this opinion for a few reasons which I will explore in the following passage.
In our adulthood, we are more active and enthusiastic. we involve our-self more in adventurous activities such as paragliding, sea-snoring, etc. In short, younger people are full of energy and want to fill their life with great memories. people go trekking, explore different places, learn about different cultures, and feel relaxed. but as time pass, our energy decrease and health issues start to lower our interest. we start to lose our enthusiasm. Take an example of my grandfather, In his teenage, he used to enjoy a lot by doing many activities such as going horse riding, hunting, and playing polo. but now, In his 70s, he become so weak due to his illness that he does not feel even to go outside for a ride. this made me realize that as time passage, we lose our interest in worldly things. Hence, I can say that young people enjoy more in their life in comparison to their old age.
Apart from the energetic behavior of an adult sometimes it is also about how we want to enjoy our life. As some people want to spend their life by traveling and doing other interesting activities while others prefer to stay at home, read books and enjoy the peace. we cannot say that their ways are wrong. they have their own way of enjoyment. such kind of enjoy is also preferable by older as well.
Thus, In conclusion, I would say that I agree with the topic that young people enjoy more than older because of their desire to live their life which is supported by their health. while it decreases as they become old.
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...ife which is supported by their health. while it decreases as they become old.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, apart from, in conclusion, in short, kind of, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1724.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62198391421 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38728167004 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514745308311 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.3133039917 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.9565217391 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2173913043 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.39130434783 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.463551435175 0.236089414692 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138233277405 0.076458572812 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.166943694217 0.0737576698707 226% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.342536350376 0.150856017488 227% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105074144078 0.0645574589148 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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