Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Today's media (TV, newspapers, and magazines, for example) offer a lot of information on many topics, but people do not use this information to really learn something thoroughly and in depth. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern 21st century there are so many sources of information that general human being is overwhelmed with new data and cannot really digest this information. Hence, personally, I believe that despite the fact that information has become more accessible people do not use it for going deeper into the subjects. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, nowadays' people do not have a chance to investigate the themes in-depth, because they are continuously distracted from learning by receiving notification on their phones, emails, messages on social networks. And their brains are overloaded with information about everything that happened in the world from the election process in the USA to the mutation of the COVID-19 virus. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. I really like science and especially videos about the solar system. But when I start to watch videos about it on YouTube, in 30 minutes I find myself watching videos about anything except the solar system. This happens because there are so many interesting themes that appear on the screen of my laptop that I cannot focus on the main topic and just click a new one to get familiarity with it. So it looks like my contemporaries and I know about everything in a light way, without knowledge of fundamental aspects.
Secondly, although there are a lot of articles and posts about almost all themes, the biggest problem is to find a good and reliable source of information. For instance, if you want to know more about quantum computing you can make a request on Google. Unfortunately, you will receive hundreds of pages with information that either is irrelevant to your request or does not contain detailed analyses of this topic. Basically, this information is useless for you. I definitely feel that the best way to understand something is to read school books and to discuss it with professors.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that modern media does not help us to learn subjects thoroughly. This is because there are a lot of distract factors that impede us to focus, and the number of resources with high-quality information in too tiny.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a light way" with adverb for "light"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...temporaries and I know about everything in a light way, without knowledge of fundamental aspec...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...thout knowledge of fundamental aspects. Secondly, although there are a lot of ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1839.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9837398374 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84234432767 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558265582656 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7813880715 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.176470588 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7058823529 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273583168688 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804831650895 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596561910404 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162380215941 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534699396875 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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