Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Practice and hard work are more important to an athlete's success than natural ability and talent. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
To get magnificent results you must dedicate all your time to your goal and work as hard as you can, especially if we talk about sports achievements. Moreover, personally, I believe that your involvement and passion for work is much more crucial than just talent or innated features. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, only when you are focused on the subject and know that you have to invest all your power and time, you can count on success. On the other hand, if you rely just on inborn ability, you will be distorted from your dream and misled about your results and opportunities. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of it. When I was at school I attended karate classes, and there was a gifted boy. Everyone told me that he would be the great champion. Unfortunately, for some reason, he relied only on his inborn ability and missed the classes, and did not spend enough time for practice. After one year he left these classes. In contrast with him, I was just a general boy without a natural ability to martial arts. But I dedicated all my free time to make my karate skills perfect. For me, it was not a surprise that I got my black belt, the highest rank in karate, just in five years.
Secondly, as we know, practice leads to perfection. Hence, the more time you repeat the task the better result you have. I remember that at school I decided to be a basketball player, but my height was not enough to be included in the school team. I realized this natural disadvantage and decided that I would be the player who hits only three-point throws from the middle of the ground. I practiced for approximately four months and my result of 99 out of 100. Our coach gave me a chance and included me in the team. For my first match, I got 33 points, which was more than anyone else in the team.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that your passion and hard work are much more important to your success and realization than natural abilities. This is because it allows you to focus on tasks and assess your real results, and only through practice you can get amazing and marvelous results.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...did not spend enough time for practice. After one year he left these classes. In cont...
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Suggestion: contrast,
...fter one year he left these classes. In contrast with him, I was just a general boy with...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...t throws from the middle of the ground. I practiced for approximately four months...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53299492386 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53628363456 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530456852792 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4999724518 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.1818181818 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9090909091 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.59090909091 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216629248999 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593734778917 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681138376375 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154763946545 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0640512830653 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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