Independent essay
What discovery of penicilline in the past 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Medicine is the main science because it has a direct influence on people's lives. Personally, I believe that the discovery of penicillin, the antibiotic that dramatically increased the survival rate, is the major finding of the last century, especially in my country. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, in my country almost all families have relatives who participated in World War 2. It is important to point out that penicillin was invented in the USSA laboratories in the mid of this war. As a result, it allowed doctors to save the lives of injured soldiers. I remember my grandfather's story. When he had been wounded he was relocated from the front to the hospital. And after surgery doctor told him that he was the luckiest man because they just had received a new remedy, penicillin. Hence, I have personal thankfulness to penicillin because as far as I understand my grandfather would have not returned home if this antibiotic had not been invented.
Secondly, apart from the military use of these chemicals, it is generally used in the civil healthcare system. Moreover, based on this invention, many other antibiotics have been discovered. Thus, its invention pushed forward the whole medical industry. Probably, each of us took a course of antibiotic therapy at least once a life. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. During the Covid-19 pandemic, I was infected with the virus. My condition was so awful that I had to intake many pills, including antibiotics. As a result, just in one week, I got better, and in one month I was cured. I do not really think that it was possible without the first step of the invention of penicillin.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that penicillin is the crucial invention of the 20th century. This is because using it allowed to save millions of lives during World War 2 and to amazingly boost the medical and chemical industries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 310, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, thus, apart from, at least, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1641.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91317365269 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91391821417 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577844311377 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.04638973 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.1428571429 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9047619048 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0909206012511 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0246149438774 0.076458572812 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0217534932478 0.0737576698707 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0597967253239 0.150856017488 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0216044087255 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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