College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
For any student, beginning their college life is a very overwhelming experience. one of the central questions a 18 year old student has to answer is ‘What do I want to do ahead?’. this determines what would they like to study. There are numerous factors that one has to consider before making a choice of a field of study. From these myriad factors that influence the choice, I disagree with the recommendation that college students must give highest importance to the availability of jobs in their field of study.
one has to question why do we go to college? do we go to college to primarily earn money or to build a career that will help us lead a fulfilling life? Superficially, every college graduate will say that their motive is to earn money. it is when these same college graduates become older, they realise that they want a life that is fulfilling. one of the key elements of a fulfilling life is doing meaningful and engaging work. The purpose of college is to enable students to lead a fulfilling life in such a way that they can add value to the society in return. this is only possible when we encourage students to pursue their passion that gives their work meaning. if we encourage everyone to pursue a field which has higher scope of landing a job, we would be devoiding students of a fulfilling and flourishing life. For instance, a students who wants to pursue theatre is pushed to pursue medicine will never be happy in his life.
Furthermore, when people realise later in their lives where their passion lies, they try to shift their career. Sometimes to do this, people have to enrol back in college or do a short term course. going to college twice is more expensive than going once. when one has to shift their career, one has to face loss of time and money. In addition, people have to also a face a lot of emotion turmoil when they make the shift. All of this can be avoided if one is not pressured into selecting a field whose only purpose is to help them to easily land a job.
if we encourage a culture where college students are basing their choice on external motivators like job availability, we are killing the culture that encourages students to explore, innovate and discover fearlessly. once upon a time, computer science was not a very lucrative field because of it’s nascent stage. it was when college drop outs like Bill Gates ventured into the technology space and innovated, we saw the booming technology industry. college students should be provided with the support system that enables them to pursue their passion and be the pioneers in their field.
one can not deny that for a lot of college graduates, it is important to earn money first. it is the need for the hour for them or their family. In such scenarios, it might not be advisable for them to pursue risky endeavours. it might be beneficial for them to assess the pursuit that will help them earn money faster. In such a case, the college graduate must pick a field of study based on the job availability in that field.
In summary, college graduates must factor in their passion as well as the realities of their lives before choosing a field of study. it is important to acknowledge the intrinsic motivators, i.e passion, socio-economic conditions, and financial conditions before you take the plunge into college.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, so, well, as to, for instance, in addition, in summary, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.3162921348 221% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 68.0 33.0505617978 206% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2829.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 587.0 442.535393258 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81942078365 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9222030514 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65073704892 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44804088586 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 890.1 704.065955056 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4513693432 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2580645161 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.935483871 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09677419355 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 7.80617977528 269% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245372969553 0.243740707755 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650847868365 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608286750804 0.0758088955206 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134108123972 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0393405325522 0.0667264976115 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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