Some people claim that a nation's government should preserve its wilderness areas in their natural state. Others argue that these areas should be developed for potential economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
When we are battling climate change and are amidst the sixth mass extinction, the government must take all measures to protect the wilderness areas in their natural state. Since the industrial age, we have been exploiting the environment for our economic gain. This has lead to a life where clean air and water are a luxury. When we decided to work towards saving the planet, we saw a significant rise in sustainable environment friendly innovations. Economic gain and preservation of nature are not a zero sum game. One does not have to come at the cost of other.
Wilderness areas are teeming with biodiversity . Each animal, bird and insect have a crucial role to play in sustaining and survival of the planet. Each and every day around 200 species are getting extinct. Organisations like WWF are working round the clock to save the biodiversity, but the fastest change will happen when the government intervenes. Declaring an area as a national park or a sanctuary enables systems to be put into place to conserve the animals and plants. It also hinders the rate of deforestation in the area.
It is not only about preserving our natural heritage but about saving mankind. Little has been done to mitigate the effects of pollution. Without any plants to soak the harmful gases, we are seeing a gradual change in our climate. Our planet is heating and there is a rise in the number of natural disasters. Consider the role of mangroves in the Mumbai city. Mumbai has mangroves which has been acting as a barrier between the rising sea water and the bustling city. Due to industrial waste being thrown into the water where mangroves grow, mangroves have been dying. Mumbai is marred with heavy rains every year which leads to heavy floods. With nothing to keep the floods in check, people die every year in Mumbai monsoons.
It is not to say that conservation should prohibit development of the people and the economic growth of the country. However, the time has come when economic growth should not be seen differently that environment preservation. Governments should come up with policies and solutions that enable industries to grow while allowing the nature to thrive. It is time for the governments to create markets that aim at sustainable development. When the government see economic growth in conservation, that is when true development will happen.
What is the point of economic development if we do not have a habitable planet? Governments should be responsible for creating nations where clean air and water are not a luxury but a right of every citizen.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2155.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 435.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95402298851 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75010138231 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519540229885 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.7165073947 60.3974514979 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.9642857143 118.986275619 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5357142857 23.4991977007 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.17857142857 5.21951772744 23% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23776106919 0.243740707755 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580061626207 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516231593789 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132379551886 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424182706543 0.0667264976115 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 14.1392134831 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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