Some people claim that a nation's government should preserve its wilderness areas in their natural state. Others argue that these areas should be developed for potential economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented
Some claim that the wilderness areas as its is should be kept in it’s natural state rather than intervening in it for economic gain, In my opinion I strongly agree with the fact that the wilderness is closed circle of life that must be kept unharmed for two reasons .
To begin, the wild life in it’s all forms managed to survive and develop through a circle of life consisting of a hierarchy of food chain that one creatures depend on one another to maintain a flow of life , in other words , one external disturbance on this closed system may have a harmful impact on the wilderness regardless of what benafits it does to the economy , and intrudicing a new breed of bees to Europe to enhance the honey industry resulted in creating a new breed of bees called 'killer bees' which made a harmful impact on other speacies such as ants , the above example does maintain that a small change could have a butterfly effect .
Further more , the bad consequenese does not always be contained and ameliorated, in many cases as we are experiencing today as the biggest threat to humanity is global warming ,It is a direct case of the extention of many specioes of animals such as bears and birds and eventually humans , in recent years more natrual disasters have happened than any other centuery, for instance these problems have been a exaverbating the situation because of the increase demand of more resorses for ourselves which does not serve the situation and good .
some would say that in order for the human race to survive it's requires a glut demand of reasourses . however , this is not the case , the average human need for living is far more than needed and in order to sustain a balanced system we have to be more efficint in our use of reasorces.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... claim that the wilderness areas as its is should be kept in it's natural sta...
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...economic gain, In my opinion I strongly agree with the fact that the wilderness is closed circle of life...
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...at must be kept unharmed for two reasons . To begin, the wild life in it&apos...
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...sting of a hierarchy of food chain that one creatures depend on one another to maintain a flo...
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...n one another to maintain a flow of life , in other words , one external disturban...
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...maintain a flow of life , in other words , one external disturbance on this closed...
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... of what benafits it does to the economy , and intrudicing a new breed of bees to ...
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...ul impact on other speacies such as ants , the above example does maintain that a ...
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...all change could have a butterfly effect . Further more , the bad consequenes...
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...e a butterfly effect . Further more , the bad consequenese does not always be...
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...est threat to humanity is global warming ,It is a direct case of the extention of ...
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...as bears and birds and eventually humans , in recent years more natrual disasters ...
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..., for instance these problems have been a exaverbating the situation because of t...
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...ch does not serve the situation and good . some would say that in order fo...
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... serve the situation and good . some would say that in order for the human r...
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...its requires a glut demand of reasourses . however , this is not the case , the av...
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...es a glut demand of reasourses . however , this is not the case , the average huma...
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...sourses . however , this is not the case , the average human need for living is fa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, for instance, such as, in many cases, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1462.0 2235.4752809 65% => OK
No of words: 310.0 442.535393258 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71612903226 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57081338097 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548387096774 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 704.065955056 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.2370786517 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 62.0 23.0359550562 269% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 212.117891749 60.3974514979 351% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 292.4 118.986275619 246% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 62.0 23.4991977007 264% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.8 5.21951772744 360% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 7.80617977528 243% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 10.2758426966 10% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221435710126 0.243740707755 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118191692785 0.0831039109588 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0879358689703 0.0758088955206 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135986326397 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0910630547223 0.0667264976115 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.8 14.1392134831 225% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 17.01 48.8420337079 35% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 26.3 12.1743820225 216% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.98 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.48 8.38706741573 125% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 11.8971910112 223% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 26.8 11.2143820225 239% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 27.0 11.7820224719 229% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.