The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a company that builds shopping malls around the country.
"The surface of a section of Route 101, paved just two years ago by Good Intentions Roadways, is now badly cracked with a number of dangerous potholes. In another part of the state, a section of Route 40, paved by Appian Roadways more than four years ago, is still in good condition. In a demonstration of their continuing commitment to quality, Appian Roadways recently purchased state-of-the-art paving machinery and hired a new quality-control manager. Therefore, I recommend hiring Appian Roadways to construct the access roads for all our new shopping malls. I predict that our Appian access roads will not have to be repaired for at least four years."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In a memo from the vice president that builds shopping malls around the country , the vice president recommends that order to sustain better access roads for longer periods that appian roadways should be hired to construct all the access roads of all the new shopping malls, the president came to this conclusion based on the flaws that faced Good intentions roadways access roads , they were badly craccked with a number of dangerous potholes as well as that Appian roadways recently purchased state-of-the-art paving machinery and hired a new quality control manager. However before this recommendation could be properly evalutaed, three questions must be answered.
First of all, Do both of Route 101 and Route 40 experience the same traffic load on a daily bases?
It might be that Route 101 was severly damaged due to the fact that more cars and therefore more heavy work was done on it , usually in roads that experience a flow of more heavy veichles are less ammune to cracks the damage in general, if the above was true, then the conclusion in the original argument is significantly weakened.
Secoundly, Are both of the comapnies use the same bulding material ? in other word, does appian roadways more high quality therefore more exipencisve materials ? it is possible that the route 40 lasted a 4-year period in a good condions was because more durable matter was used in order to strengthen the road and make them more ammune to such damage. If this seanrio have merit , then the conclusion in the original argument does hold water.
Thirdly, was the service cost and overall expencies on building these routes the same? It might be possible that appian roadways charges more for its services that it’s competetor, in some cases a more matecoules build requires more advanced mahinary which by it self demand a more experinced work force and that does it’s toll on the bill for such fine work , if Good intentions roadways do charge less than appian ,then conclusion of the president does hold water.
In conclusion,the argument as it stands now , is considenrly flwaed due its reliance on inwarranted assumptions, if the presiodnt is able to answer the three questions and offer more evidnce then ots possible to fully evalluate the proposed recommendation to hire appian roadways.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 383 350
No. of Characters: 1871 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.424 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.885 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.552 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 38.3 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 25.227 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.9 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.718 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, well, in conclusion, in general, as well as, first of all, in some cases, as well as that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1939.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 381.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08923884514 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70818443325 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524934383202 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.8473053892 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 156.820737792 57.8364921388 271% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 176.272727273 119.503703932 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.6363636364 23.324526521 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.2727272727 5.70786347227 233% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148260084531 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046646274253 0.0743258471296 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531979194258 0.0701772020484 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0713108123397 0.128457276422 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04699897264 0.0628817314937 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.9 14.3799401198 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.197005988 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 12.3882235529 218% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.1389221557 140% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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