The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a company that builds shopping malls around the country.
"The surface of a section of Route 101, paved just two years ago by Good Intentions Roadways, is now badly cracked with a number of dangerous potholes. In another part of the state, a section of Route 40, paved by Appian Roadways more than four years ago, is still in good condition. In a demonstration of their continuing commitment to quality, Appian Roadways recently purchased state-of-the-art paving machinery and hired a new quality-control manager. Therefore, I recommend hiring Appian Roadways to construct the access roads for all our new shopping malls. I predict that our Appian access roads will not have to be repaired for at least four years."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Firstly, the Vice President (vp) states that route 101 was constructed by gir two years ago is not in good shape any more, whereas route 40 was paved by ar four years ago is still well maintained. but before this point could be noted in favor of ar, we need to understand several important details. first, what is the flow of traffic on the two roads? it could route 101 might be experiencing ten times more traffic than route 40. also. route 101 might be preferred for heavy vehicles carrying cargo whereas, route 40 is travelled by general public in their 1100-2300 CC cars. second, what has been the maintenance schedule for two the roads. it could be route 101 is only repaired once a year whereas patches are laid on quarterly basis for route 40.
Secondly, in favor of ar, vp states that they have recently purchased new machinery and also hired a quality-control professional. but it remains unknown if these silent features are missing with gir or not. we are unsure if gir has a function governing the quality of the services or not and if they under-equipped and have outdated technology. if the latter is the situation, then it should be mentioned to support the debate. also, it not discussed if the equipment will be deployed for the type of paving that will be required for our new roads. it could be the case that it will be used for constructing the roads on mountainous topography whereas the city has lowland plain terrain. In such a case, the new technology will be of no use to us. Moreover, before we could consider the new resource as a plus point for ar, we need to know how ar team has been managing the quality-control function so far. it could be that they already had someone in the team working in the same capacity and since that person has moved out, an equally qualified new manager has been recruited as replacement. In this case there be very less or no significant value addition.
Thirdly, the writer presents his case with the presumption that since ar has been successful with route 40, it will be the right choice for new roads and if ar is shortlisted then the roads will be required to repairment only after next four years. but before these could be finalized, various details need to be taken into consideration. first, we need to factor the specification of new road such as flow of traffic and soil condition of the area. second, it should be confirmed if the maintenance schedule has been shared after discussion with ar or not.
it might be true that route 40 might be better product than route 101, but before we could proceed with any decision, the above queries but answered.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 469 350
No. of Characters: 2107 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.654 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.493 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.567 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 46.9 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 31.014 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.413 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.633 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.195 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 196, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...our years ago is still well maintained. but before this point could be noted in fav...
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Line 1, column 298, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
...o understand several important details. first, what is the flow of traffic on the two...
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Line 1, column 351, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...s the flow of traffic on the two roads? it could route 101 might be experiencing t...
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Line 1, column 430, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...g ten times more traffic than route 40. also. route 101 might be preferred for heavy...
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Line 1, column 430, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...g ten times more traffic than route 40. also. route 101 might be preferred for heavy...
^^^^
Line 1, column 430, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: also,
...g ten times more traffic than route 40. also. route 101 might be preferred for heavy...
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Line 1, column 436, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Route
...times more traffic than route 40. also. route 101 might be preferred for heavy vehicl...
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Line 1, column 533, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...cargo whereas, route 40 is travelled by general public in their 1100-2300 CC cars. second, wha...
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Line 1, column 576, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Second
...eral public in their 1100-2300 CC cars. second, what has been the maintenance schedule...
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Line 1, column 642, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...maintenance schedule for two the roads. it could be route 101 is only repaired onc...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d on quarterly basis for route 40. Secondly, in favor of ar, vp states that...
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Line 6, column 132, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...o hired a quality-control professional. but it remains unknown if these silent feat...
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Line 6, column 209, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: We
...t features are missing with gir or not. we are unsure if gir has a function govern...
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Line 6, column 347, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...-equipped and have outdated technology. if the latter is the situation, then it sh...
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Line 6, column 431, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...ld be mentioned to support the debate. also, it not discussed if the equipment will...
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Suggestion: It
...hat will be required for our new roads. it could be the case that it will be used ...
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Line 6, column 910, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ng the quality-control function so far. it could be that they already had someone ...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ss or no significant value addition. Thirdly, the writer presents his case wi...
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Line 10, column 250, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
... repairment only after next four years. but before these could be finalized, variou...
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Line 10, column 340, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
...ls need to be taken into consideration. first, we need to factor the specification of...
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Line 10, column 451, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Second
...traffic and soil condition of the area. second, it should be confirmed if the maintena...
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Line 12, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...red after discussion with ar or not. it might be true that route 40 might be ...
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Line 14, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...fter discussion with ar or not. it might be true that route 40 might be be...
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Line 14, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cision, the above queries but answered.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, well, whereas, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.6327345309 183% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2177.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 469.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64179104478 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62664413543 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481876332623 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 4.96107784431 242% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0895342646 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9545454545 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3181818182 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.18181818182 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 24.0 5.25449101796 457% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.093537007468 0.218282227539 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0324009620692 0.0743258471296 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498812559457 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0716561734982 0.128457276422 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604850368913 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.3550499002 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 12.5979740519 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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