The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a company that builds shopping malls around the country.
"The surface of a section of Route 101, paved just two years ago by Good Intentions Roadways, is now badly cracked with a number of dangerous potholes. In another part of the state, a section of Route 40, paved by Appian Roadways more than four years ago, is still in good condition. In a demonstration of their continuing commitment to quality, Appian Roadways recently purchased state-of-the-art paving machinery and hired a new quality-control manager. Therefore, I recommend hiring Appian Roadways to construct the access roads for all our new shopping malls. I predict that our Appian access roads will not have to be repaired for at least four years."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the memo given by the vice president of a company who builds shopping malls states that for the roads that are needed to be built as the access roads for the new shopping malls. They should hire Appian Roadways to built the road for them and not McAdam Road Builders. The vice president supports the above conclusion by saying that, a section of Rout 101, which was paved by the McAdam Road Builders is currently in very bad condition and also contains many potholes. On the other hand, a part of a road on Route 66 on the other side of the states which was paved by the Appian Roadways, built before 4 years is still now in good condition. The above argument is flawed as the vice president keeps short in answering the following questions.
Firstly, The usage of both the roads, was it similar? which means that the usability of both the roads is it comparable. Maybe, the roads on Route 101, which was built by McAdam Road builders is more heavily used than Route 66. Maybe Route 101 is a highway where only extra large vehicles run, and route 66 is only used by small vehicles. It may be possible that the state is too big and the weather conditions on one place is different than the other, now comparing the two roads they are located at two different parts of the state, that means may be the precipitation around Route 101 area is very high as compared to route 66, as precipitation leads damaging of roads very quickly. If the above question holds true then the argument is flawed.
Secondly, is the new paving machinery bought good and efficient than the previous method of paving roads used by Appian Roadways? Or, are the McAdam Road Builders do the same bad work they used to do before? It may be possible that the new machinery bought would not result in the quality of work that Appian Roadways used to do before they bought the paving machines, or it may be the case that, because of the old quality-control manager who was experienced in this field and the part of route 66 built under his supervision was very strong and the new quality-control manager is new in this field and does not have much experience than previous qc manager. It is also possible that currently McAdam Road Builders have much more advanced machinery and better team at work. There can be a possibility that, funding provided to McAdam Road builders might be less than the required funding, which forces McAdam Road Builders to choose low quality material. If any of the above questions prove to be true then the argument does not hold waters.
The conclusion of the argument, which is based on some unwarranted evidence may not be true until the vice president provides answers to the questions stated above along with some evidence in a form of research study. Also only one of the works of Appian Roadways is used. Thus we need more evidence to proof that the works of Appian Roadways are good. To efficiently evaluate the above questions are needed to be answered.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 531 350
No. of Characters: 2389 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.8 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.499 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.361 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.55 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.451 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.499 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 55, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Which
...sage of both the roads, was it similar? which means that the usability of both the ro...
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Line 5, column 55, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...sage of both the roads, was it similar? which means that the usability of both the ro...
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Line 5, column 392, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ssible that the state is too big and the weather conditions on one place is diffe...
^^
Line 5, column 439, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...er conditions on one place is different than the other, now comparing the two roads ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 688, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...n leads damaging of roads very quickly. If the above question holds true then the ...
^^
Line 9, column 154, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Appian Roadways? Or, are the McAdam Road Builders do the same bad work they used ...
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Line 9, column 936, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to low'
Suggestion: to low
...h forces McAdam Road Builders to choose low quality material. If any of the above q...
^^^
Line 9, column 958, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...uilders to choose low quality material. If any of the above questions prove to be ...
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Line 13, column 219, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...e evidence in a form of research study. Also only one of the works of Appian Roadway...
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Line 13, column 274, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...f the works of Appian Roadways is used. Thus we need more evidence to proof that the...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.6327345309 188% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2447.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 531.0 441.139720559 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60828625235 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41846773956 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.416195856874 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 748.8 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 98.1546283461 57.8364921388 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.523809524 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2857142857 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2380952381 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139088061313 0.218282227539 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0448341150885 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051436970835 0.0701772020484 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0956623463889 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703612040096 0.0628817314937 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.5979740519 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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