The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
"Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The aritcle written by Dr. Karp states that Dr. Field's observation about the childern of Tertia village, that children were reared by the other people in village rather than there own parents further the approach taken by Dr. Field is invalid and supports this by providing that recent interviews conducted shows that children talk about their own parents rather than talking about the people in island and the interviewing method is is better than the observation centric method. However, the conclusion is flawed and lacks in answering following questions.
Firstly, Dr. Karp is assuming that the culture used back twenty years ago is still existing.It is possible that the governing bodies might have changed since the twenty year period and may have made certain changes in the village, which might show that the children present in the village now have diffrent opinions contrasting the views of the children back then.It is also possible that people twenty years ago were more restricted and were taciturned about their culture and that is the reason why Dr. Field choose the observation- centered approach.This way of thinking might have changed since twenty year period and the people of the island are ready to share their culture with others.
Secondly, Dr. Karp is prescience that the team of graduate students who are currently performing the experiment on children of Tertia will result in estabilishing more precise understanding aboout the Tertian culture. It might happen that even if they are ready to be interviewed by the team of graduate students, they might not reveal their culture.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 263 350
No. of Characters: 1329 1500
No. of Different Words: 131 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.027 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.053 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.427 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 102 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 43.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 27.661 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.468 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.721 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 175, Rule ID: THERE_OWN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'their own'?
Suggestion: their own
...the other people in village rather than there own parents further the approach taken by D...
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Line 1, column 432, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: is
...e in island and the interviewing method is is better than the observation centric met...
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Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...back twenty years ago is still existing.It is possible that the governing bodies m...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...ing the views of the children back then.It is also possible that people twenty yea...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...oose the observation- centered approach.This way of thinking might have changed sinc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 55.5748502994 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1355.0 2260.96107784 60% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 260.0 441.139720559 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21153846154 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54035768343 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 204.123752495 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519230769231 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 396.0 705.55239521 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 52.0 22.8473053892 228% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 231.941889274 57.8364921388 401% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 271.0 119.503703932 227% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 52.0 23.324526521 223% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 17.6 5.70786347227 308% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238244805521 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100409378162 0.0743258471296 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0753357206553 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146032389299 0.128457276422 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529019441835 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.1 14.3799401198 202% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 27.16 48.3550499002 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.4 12.197005988 184% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.83 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.32208582834 119% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 98.500998004 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.8 11.1389221557 205% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 23.0 11.9071856287 193% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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