The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Learning plays an important role in students lives. How to learn plays more important role. The prompt suggests that the best way for individuals to prepare for leadership qualities is to teach them how to learn cooperatively. I agree with the prompt for following two reasons.
Learning in cooperation has many benefits as compared to learning in competition. For instance, when students learn in cooperation they get to learn about other opinions of students and have multiple viewpoints on a particular problem including their own opinion. This approach is beneficial as the student involved will understand how to tackle a problem differently, the opinion that he has, is it efficient enough than others. It will also help a student who is not able to solve a particular problem as he will get familiar with opinions of other students. One more advantage of learning cooperatively is that students will understand how to work along with their colleagues which will enhance their leadership qualities.Whereas in competition students will think of other students as competitors and they might not take their opinions. In such situations the students might have less different opinions about a particular problem. Hence, it is more beneficial to learn in an cooperation as it has more benefits.
Secondly, the most required skill in firms and companies is that can a individual work in a team cooperatively? Most of the firms and any other fields require a candidate to have cooperative skills and check whether they are able to work in harmony along with their teammates. For example, when a company receives a project. The company assigns a team for that particular project. As working in team everyone shares their opinion and the team can combine all of the ideas and opinions to efficiently perform the project. Therefore, teaching young individuals to learn in cooperative environment is very important as it teaches them the most required skill in an industry, government sector or any other field.
However, some might argue that competition enhance a individuals own capabilities and this is more important and beneficial for a individual. In my opinion, I beleive that learning cooperatively is more beneficial and important.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Whereas
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, for example, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1892.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 360.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25555555556 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06085903378 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 587.7 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.3815201683 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5789473684 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9473684211 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68421052632 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142283979303 0.243740707755 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532463307083 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742929488789 0.0758088955206 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0997947117433 0.150359130593 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606078874784 0.0667264976115 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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