This argument is about children of Tertia, Where two people outside of Tertia have conducted two survey. They have used 2 independent approaches, i.e Observation Centered approach vs. Interview Centered approach. Dr. Field has used Obrservation centered approach, Which defines from wording as observation . He must have stayed on the island for weeks or months. Under this approach, he must have done some hypothesis. It should be such as not directly interviewed any questions from children, indirecly interation with children, to understand their behaviour in general. It could be good approach to get exact information that is based on observation. There will be no change in their behaviour. Since, they don't need any preperation for any interview. They won't be scared for anything. They will just do daily work as they do every day.
Under Interview based approach, People will ask questions. Sometimes children get scared or shy from interviewers. They first think and then answer about their question asked by the interviewer.
For second approach, there could be anything wrong or right, a normal person also can be shy/scred from the interviewer. They are not spokepersons, who interacts with everyday interview. First approach could also be wrong. There is a quote" Every glitter is not Gold" It defines What you see is not correct. If you feel , then only you can say thay that glitter is gold or not.
about given argument, We cannot say that using second approach i.e interview based approach ,''Children of Tertia Island spend much time with their parents. They could be wrong or right. It could be reason that children were scared with their interviewers , and then they just talked about their bioligical parents not about adults of the village. There adults must have taught them to just talk
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: It should be such as not directly interviewed any questions from children, indirecly interation with children, to understand their behaviour in general.
Error: behaviour Suggestion: behavior
Error: indirecly Suggestion: indirectly
Error: interation Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: There will be no change in their behaviour.
Error: behaviour Suggestion: behavior
Sentence: Since, they don't need any preperation for any interview.
Error: preperation Suggestion: preparation
Sentence: For second approach, there could be anything wrong or right, a normal person also can be shy/scred from the interviewer.
Error: scred Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: They are not spokepersons, who interacts with everyday interview.
Error: spokepersons Suggestion: spoke persons
Sentence: If you feel , then only you can say thay that glitter is gold or not. about given argument, We cannot say that using second approach i.e interview based approach ,''Children of Tertia Island spend much time with their parents.
Error: '' Suggestion: an
Error: thay Suggestion: than
Sentence: It could be reason that children were scared with their interviewers , and then they just talked about their bioligical parents not about adults of the village.
Error: bioligical Suggestion: biological
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 300 350
No. of Characters: 1469 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.162 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.897 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.534 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 94 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 68 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 12.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.911 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.25 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.269 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.269 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 98, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'survey' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'surveys'.
Suggestion: surveys
...le outside of Tertia have conducted two survey. They have used 2 independent approache...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 306, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...hich defines from wording as observation . He must have stayed on the island for w...
^^
Line 2, column 710, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... change in their behaviour. Since, they dont need any preperation for any interview....
^^^^
Line 4, column 330, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...What you see is not correct. If you feel , then only you can say thay that glitter...
^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: About
...say thay that glitter is gold or not. about given argument, We cannot say that usin...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 92, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...nd approach i.e interview based approach ,Children of Tertia Island spend much tim...
^^
Line 5, column 254, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...dren were scared with their interviewers , and then they just talked about their b...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, then, in general, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 55.5748502994 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 295.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17288135593 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71174992878 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559322033898 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 4.96107784431 302% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 22.8473053892 53% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2858401443 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.5833333333 119.503703932 53% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.2916666667 23.324526521 53% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.25 5.70786347227 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.67664670659 299% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151925172139 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0500705369532 0.0743258471296 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639684812021 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0881087978789 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604205230652 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 14.3799401198 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 48.3550499002 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 12.197005988 56% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 11.82 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 11.1389221557 61% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.9071856287 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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