"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town---Adams Realty and Fitch Realty---Adams is
clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom
work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch,
and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes
listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago, I listed my home with Fitch and it took
more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it
took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams."
Because of the superiority of Adams in several perspective, the author of the argument recommended that if anyone want to sell his or her home quickly and at a good price, he or she should use Adams. In claiming that the author said that Home listed with Adams is faster than Fitch's, because ten years ago Fitch took four months to sell author's home wheres last year Adams took only one month to sell his home. However, before accepting author's suggestion we need to evaluate several unwarranted assumptions what author made in strengthening the argument.
Firstly, the author of the argument assumes that the situation of the Fitch, in selling home, is same as it was ten years ago and author didn’t provide any further evidence in assuming that. At present, there may be better performance of Fitch in selling home compares to Adams. Moreover, Adams' last year quickness in selling home may not hold true in present. Therefore, if the above situation may hold true, author's argument will fall apart.
Secondly, the author said that Adam's last year revenue was twice as high as Fitch's. Here author assumed that higher revenue means one's chance of getting higher price in selling home is high. Apparently, it may holds true. But it is possible for the situation that Adams makes higher profit by giving a low incentive to the home owner, then the author's argument will not hold the water.
Finally, another faulty assumption is that as it takes one month for him to sell the home through Adams, it will take the same time for everyone. Seemingly it may be true. But in case of others Adams may take much time. May be the author has a friend in Adams who made the selling of his home quicker. Thus, one can say that author's argument may not hold true.
In conclusion, though the author's recommendation may be appealing in one hand, in order to accept his recommendation author should provide more evidence to clarify the faulty assumptions stated above.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 340 350
No. of Characters: 1582 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.294 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.653 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.402 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.233 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.938 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.405 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.604 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.155 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 40, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun perspective seems to be countable; consider using: 'several perspectives'.
Suggestion: several perspectives
Because of the superiority of Adams in several perspective, the author of the argument recommended...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 115, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'anyone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...the argument recommended that if anyone want to sell his or her home quickly and at ...
^^^^
Line 1, column 351, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: where's
...h took four months to sell authors home wheres last year Adams took only one month to ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 131, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...uthor assumed that higher revenue means ones chance of getting higher price in selli...
^^^^
Line 5, column 345, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...w incentive to the home owner, then the authors argument will not hold the water. F...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 225, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...of others Adams may take much time. May be the author has a friend in Adams who ma...
^^
Line 9, column 27, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...old true. In conclusion, though the authors recommendation may be appealing in one ...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 202, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fy the faulty assumptions stated above.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, then, therefore, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1627.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 339.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7994100295 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4550146385 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492625368732 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.2638948644 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7058823529 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9411764706 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.29411764706 5.70786347227 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144799616076 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655133038849 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752029754104 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0927326843881 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530327037432 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 98.500998004 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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