Of the two leading real estate firms in our town Adams Realty and Fitch Realty Adams Realty is clearly superior Adams has 40 real estate agents in contrast Fitch has 25 many of whom work only part time Moreover Adams revenue last year was twice as high as

In the given piece, the writer is comparing two real estate firms in a specific town named Adam and Fitch reality. The writer has concluded about two firms by disjointed and incomplete data about their work efficiency and overall sales.
In the very starting of the case, the writer has declared that Adam reality is clearly superior to Fitch's reality. The writer is comparing the crowd of real estate agents working in an individual firm regardless of their work efficiency. Although there are 40 real estate agent in Adam reality, it is not necessary that all the agents working in the firm has an excellent convincing skills or let's say work experience. Whereas, in Fitch reality, there are 25 agents who are specifically working as part-time agents. There can be possibility that these 25 agents have way more convincing skills and work experience compared to Adam reality. So, the number of agents working does not specifically specify the firm's efficiency.
Furthermore, there is comparison given between the overall sales previous year. The overall average revenue generated by Adam's reality was $168,000 whereas, the average revenue generated by Fitch's reality was $144,000. If we compare these data with the number of real estate working in these two firms, there is difference of only $24,000 average revenue, whereas the difference in real estate agent is of 15. Adding to it, the real estate agent working in Fitch real estate firm are part-time. There fore the overall sales done by individual working agent of Fitch is greater than Adam's. So, here the writer's conclusion contradicts with the given data.
Lastly, the writer is comparing the time taken by the firms to sell houses which is completely irrelevant, because there is a gap of a decade. The writer listed his home under Fitch reality which took nearly four months for selling it which was a decade before. Whereas, last year when the writer listed his home under Adam's reality, it got sold within one month. These type of data can only be compared when there is relevant data known or given, whether the demand of houses last year and before one decade was same? What was the economic condition of that city at their respective time?
So, in general we can say that, writer has failed to make a convincing argument because of incomplete data. No convincing reasons have been provided.

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Average: 6.9 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 273, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'agents'?
Suggestion: agents
...ency. Although there are 40 real estate agent in Adam reality, it is not necessary th...
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Line 2, column 273, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'agent' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'agents'.
Suggestion: agents
...ency. Although there are 40 real estate agent in Adam reality, it is not necessary th...
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Line 2, column 384, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'skill'?
Suggestion: skill
...in the firm has an excellent convincing skills or lets say work experience. Whereas, i...
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Line 2, column 394, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...m has an excellent convincing skills or lets say work experience. Whereas, in Fitch ...
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Line 2, column 708, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'firms'' or 'firm's'?
Suggestion: firms'; firm's
...rking does not specifically specify the firms efficiency. Furthermore, there is comp...
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Line 3, column 489, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: Therefore
...n Fitch real estate firm are part-time. There fore the overall sales done by individual wo...
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Line 3, column 596, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...tch is greater than Adams. So, here the writers conclusion contradicts with the given d...
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Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... convincing reasons have been provided.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, lastly, so, whereas, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1963.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 397.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94458438287 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45740573766 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450881612091 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.4547394399 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4761904762 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9047619048 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.28571428571 5.70786347227 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350912952138 0.218282227539 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112963149167 0.0743258471296 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0957731967428 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188747784922 0.128457276422 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116655110812 0.0628817314937 186% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 397 350
No. of Characters: 1924 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.464 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.846 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.407 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.85 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.858 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.45 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.344 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.151 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5