Of the two leading real estate firms in our town — Adams Realty and Fitch Realty — Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty.
In asserting that Adams Realty is superior than Fitch Realty, selling homes quicker and at better prices, the argument makes four main assumptions. The argument implies that the 40 real estate agents who work for Adams have a higher productivity than the 25 who work for Fitch. Also, the comparison of revenues implies that selling more is selling with better profit margins for the home owners; the unstated assumption is that the higher average selling price achieved by Adams actually produces more profits for the home owners. Finally, by comparing how fast one house was sold ten years ago by Fitch with one sold a year ago by Adams, the argument assumes no other external effects, like the overall economy and the demand in the housing market, could explain the difference. Let's dive into each assumption.
First, the argument assumes that the 40 real estate agents who work for Adams are at least as productive as the 25 who work for Fitch. This might not be true, which would invalidate the conclusion. Consider the hypothesis in which each real estate agents from Fitch can perform twice as fast as an agent from Adams, even considering that some of Fitch's agents work only part-time, visiting more properties and handling more customers each. In that case, regardless of having less full-time real estate agents, Fitch would have a higher productivity, thus having a superior workforce.
Second, the argument uses the higher revenue generated by Adams, together with a higher average price per home sold, as a performance indicator to support its superiority. That might be misleading. What if the profit generated to the home owners in each sale is higher for those who have chosen Fitch over Adams? Consider the scenario in which the average asking price of homeowners who have chosen Fitch was $100,000, while the average asking price of those who have chosen Adams was $200,000. In that scenario, each sale completed by Fitch would have produced over 40% profit for their customers, while each sale done by Adams would have produced over 10% loss for theirs.
Finally, the comparison of two very distant periods might also be misleading. It assumes that external factors, such as the overall economy and the demand in the housing market, did not change during this timeframe. This is unlikely, as it compares ten years ago with one year ago, a very long time. Changes in external factors such as those mentioned could very well explain why it took Fitch four months to sell one house ten years ago, while it took Adams only one month to sell one house a year ago, and still not support that Adams is superior than Fitch.
To confidently conclude that Adams Realty is the best choice to sell your home quickly and at a good price, at least these four assumptions should be better investigated. Otherwise, people might mistakenly choose the worst option to sell their homes.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 489 350
No. of Characters: 2342 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.702 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.789 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.292 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.45 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.102 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.536 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.078 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 44, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[1]
Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
...asserting that Adams Realty is superior than Fitch Realty, selling homes quicker and...
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Line 1, column 781, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...g market, could explain the difference. Lets dive into each assumption. First, ...
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Line 13, column 550, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[1]
Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
...till not support that Adams is superior than Fitch. To confidently conclude tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, if, second, so, still, thus, well, while, at least, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2417.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 489.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9427402863 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38640230536 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.439672801636 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 746.1 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.4316030349 57.8364921388 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.85 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.45 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276500601994 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823639458601 0.0743258471296 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0773794868834 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157863045691 0.128457276422 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064303464989 0.0628817314937 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4 Out of 6
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